Talk:The Moth (Lost)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: BenLinus1214 (talk · contribs) 21:29, 9 May 2015 (UTC)

Hello again. Give me a couple hours to read this article. BenLinus 1214 talk 21:29, 9 May 2015 (UTC) Comments


 * I feel that the plot summary is a bit too long. Are there any details that you feel that you could cut out? It's clocking in at 863 words currently, and per WP:TVPLOT, plot summaries should be around 200 to 500 words. It's okay if it's a bit over that word count, but the bottom line is that it needs to be shorter.
 * Once again, for the caption in the production section, you need a period.


 * The second "Production" paragraph is too long and hard to navigate. Perhaps you could split it somewhere?
 * Let me know how that looks.


 * Is the entire second paragraph sourced to those three footnotes? If so, then it's probably a good idea to ref name those footnotes and place them throughout the paragraph. In particular, I think it would be a good idea for you to source direct quotes. It's a bit jarring when these quotes don't have a ref at the end of them, and it makes them look unsourced.


 * Your reference to "Pilot" in the reception section does not have an end quote.


 * You usually add something about the Los Angeles Times list of Lost episodes. Where is that in this article?
 * Added.

If you can clean this stuff up, then I'll pass it. :) BenLinus  1214 talk 00:27, 10 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, I'll cut down the plot summary shortly. -Newyorkadam (talk) 15:47, 12 May 2015 (UTC)Newyorkadam
 * I cut down the plot a bit— lemme know how that looks. Newyorkadam (talk) 15:47, 18 May 2015 (UTC)Newyorkadam
 * That's good enough, but in future episode articles, keep it to a bit shorter length. The next two episodes look pretty good in that regard, and I'll review those two soon. Pass. BenLinus  1214 talk 23:09, 18 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks! I'll look into cutting those down a bit soon. -Newyorkadam (talk) 01:14, 19 May 2015 (UTC)Newyorkadam