Talk:The Negotiation (The Office)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 01:54, 17 December 2012 (UTC)


 * "... a "super-sized" episode. " -- It isn't ever defined what a "super sized" episode is and who uses the term.
 * As with other Office articles, I think this one would benefit if all the subplots were organized into seperate paragraphs. As-is, it sort of bounces around in a way that is confusing for a plot summary.
 * The last sentence of the plot summary, "Toby Flenderson (Paul Lieberstein) confiscates the rest of Dwight's arsenal." would be aided a little if you explain how Dwight had weapons hidden around the office.
 * In the plot summary, you don't note the actors who portray Jan, Kevin and Karen.
 * Also, you never specify who Kate Flannery portrays, which makes her mention in the "Production" section a little confusing.
 * The text notes that Andy Bernard is not yet a regular cast member yet, but he doesn't appear as a guest actor in the infoboc.
 * No, he is a regular cast member at this point (NBC announced his promotion to regular status in early February, and this aired in April).


 * Duplicate link tool returns two results: Andy Bernard and IGN.
 * Checklink tool shows no problems for external links, and dablinks shows no problems with disambiguations.
 * Altogether none of these things are too major. Will put the review on hold and wait for responses. — Ed! (talk) 02:24, 17 December 2012 (UTC)
 * I've edited or responded to all of your suggestions. Thanks very much for the review! Please let me know if there is anything else that needs doing.  Ruby  2010/  2013  20:49, 17 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Excellent work. Passing the GA. — Ed! (talk) 23:08, 17 December 2012 (UTC)