Talk:The Overlook (Alexander McQueen collection)/GA1

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 02:48, 30 January 2024 (UTC)

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Just some copyedits and one pending minor, likely easy to answer, question about ref 41. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 03:16, 30 January 2024 (UTC)

Lead

 * to appear in original 2011 staging missing "the"?

Background

 * Deliverance, (Spring/Summer 2004) Remove this comma
 * The two met during their student years Leane was trained as a classical goldsmith who worked in traditional formats, but McQueen encouraged him to branch out into other materials and shapes Missing semicolon after "years"

Concept

 * the fourteenth collection by British fashion designer Alexander McQueen for his eponymous fashion house You have already introduced McQueen in the above section, so the bolded part is unneeded.
 * This is weird - not sure why you're seeing any bold, but that part has never been bolded for me and I don't see any diffs of anyone else adding or removing any.
 * I understand what you meant now that you've fixed it lol

Runway show

 * recently-deceased should not be hyphenated.
 * After Look 53, the lights went down and there was yes, after "down", there should be a comma (WP:CINS)
 * McQueen's "brevity gave me room to manoeuvre." quote of a sentence fragment should have the period outside. Check for further issues of this kind; I see one in the next L2 section.
 * Fixed this one, but if you're talking about the quote that starts with "it's almost like it forces you...", the part with the period is a separate sentence, so the period goes inside

Reception

 * In her biography, Alexander McQueen: The Life and the Legacy, Judith Watt biography Remove the second "biography"
 * Lol oops
 * She wrote that "some pronounced it his best show", but disagreed; Remove comma (CinS)

Sourcing and spot checks

 * 15: Thomas p. 286: isolation and obscurity quote, snow machine trouble (actually p. 287), Winsett/Blanchett/Jones/Massive Attack/Mirren attendance, McQueen's mother (also 287), and rarity of ovation in fashion. ✅
 * 17: Watt p. 156: "coat cut with a fantail bird silhouette" ✅
 * 21: Cannot view the book preview, but it is in the right section. AGF tick.
 * 37: No preview of the cited volume.
 * 41: Preview seems to check out. Is the White Witch the same as the Ice Queen mentioned?
 * The White Witch is never referred to as the Ice Queen in any of the Narnia books, but there's also no other character who even remotely resembles an ice-wielding female ruler. When you Google "Narnia Ice Queen", Jadis/the White Witch is the inevitable result. It's clear who the reviewer is referring to, they've just misremembered the character's proper name.

Earwig flags only a long quote and the banal "on February 23, 1999, at Gatliff Road Warehouse in London".

Images
The coiled corset image has a VRT ticket permitting use. The puffer jacket image is CC-licensed. Encouragement: Add alt text.
 * Alt text added, thanks for the reminder. Thank you again for the review, everything should be addressed. &spades;PMC&spades; (talk) 22:19, 30 January 2024 (UTC)