Talk:The Princess Diaries, Volume V: Princess in Pink

Inappropriate tone tag in the 'Plot summary' section
I tagged the Plot summary section for inappropriate tone because articles should be written in a formal, descriptive tone. The plot summary (see version) of this article contains a few parts which seem more suitable for a non-neutral review of the book (intended to draw readers into the story or create dramatic/emotional effect) rather than a neutral description of it. For example:


 * "Mia Thermopolis is in a royal muddle."
 * "Her one and only boyfriend..."
 * "At the dinner, disaster strikes."
 * "Then comes the birthday party."

A general cleanup of the plot summary would be appreciated. The Manual of Style guideline on writing about fiction and the essay on how to write a plot summary may be useful aids.

Cheers, -- Black Falcon (talk) 20:13, 28 September 2010 (UTC)