Talk:The Race Against Time/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:50, 25 April 2020 (UTC)

Shall be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 09:50, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "who has to go to six continents" - venture is more formal
 * "and raise flags to begin the 1988 Sport Aid." - please clarify what the 1988 Sport Aid was to the uninformed
 * "Codemasters' unauthorised" - shouldn't it be zed for consistency?

Gameplay

 * "The goal of the game is to raise a flag and light a torch bowl in six continents in five in-game hours," - over
 * "In side-scrolling game screens, he runs past landmarks such as" - the player
 * "He travels between screens by using airplanes" - same issue as above
 * "Each continent have unique environmental hazards to avoid," - has or contains
 * " Letting the time run out would also cause the game to end. Collecting hourglasses would increase the amount of time left." - consider merging and reworking some to improve the flow rather than an almost CV-based stacatto
 * "beginnging the 1988 Sport Aid." - typo; should be beginning

Development

 * "The Race Against Time was designed by the Oliver Twins, Andrew and Philip Oliver. The game was developed and published by Codemasters." - how about merging these two sentences and shortening them accordingly?
 * "on May 7th, 1988." - the date format should be changed to May 7, 1988 per MOS:DATE
 * "The game was released in 1988 for the Amstrad CPC, Commodore 64, and ZX Spectrum computers." - this sentence requires a reliable source to verify it
 * "However, after the game had been released, Owens’s estate objected." - think you want to clarify what Owens' state objected to an image of him on the game cover
 * "from the estate to use Owens's likeness, and the estate declined to grant permission retroactively." - repetition of the word "estate"

Reception

 * The parentheses in the CVG column in the table to the right should have a space added to the left of the scores
 * "Zzap!64 reviewed the Commodore 64 version, describing it as "abysmal". The magazine also criticized the controls for being too awkward." - consider merging the two sentences together and making it more concise
 * "In December 1988, Code Masters" - Codemasters

Will place the review on hold to allow the nominator time to respond/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 05:08, 26 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I believe I addressed all the issues here. GamerPro64  23:16, 26 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 06:43, 27 April 2020 (UTC)