Talk:The Rules of the Game/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 08:35, 28 November 2016 (UTC)

I will review this article, thank you. Looks good at first glance. — Ssven2  Speak 2 me 08:35, 28 November 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * "1939 French film directed by Jean Renoir and starring Nora Gregor, Paulette Dubost, Mila Parély, Marcel Dalio, Julien Carette, Roland Toutain, Gaston Modot, Pierre Magnier and Renoir." — Too long a sentence. Maybe like this: "1939 French film directed by Jean Renoir. The film features an ensemble cast of Nora Gregor, Paulette Dubost, Mila Parély, Marcel Dalio, Julien Carette, Roland Toutain, Gaston Modot, Pierre Magnier and Renoir."
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)


 * It would be good if you just wrote "See Cast" (like the Star Trek FAs) instead of mentioning all the names in the infobox there. Looks a bit bloated.
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)

Plot

 * Well-written. Within the 400-700 limit. Addresses the points about the film perfectly.

Cast

 * Can you add a source to show the details of the cast members? (Use the cast section of FA articles like Dilwale Dulhania Le Jayenge, Chandralekha (1948 film) and Mayabazar as reference to see what I mean.) :-)
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)

Production

 * "He was also anxious about the Munich agreement and the strong possibility of another world war, and wanted to film a "happy dream."" — Kind of vague here. Is it that he wanted people to leave the theatres with a smile on their faces rather than worry about the then impending WWII?
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)


 * "such as the works of Marivaux, Beaumarchais and especially Musset's" — Even if wikilinked, their full names ought to be there for those who may not be familiar with them.
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)


 * "Renoir re-wrote the character Christine for the Austrian actress and fell in love with her during pre-production." — Did he really fall in love with her or was it just based on the words of his colleagues?
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)


 * "But the cast and crew admired Renoir and enjoyed the carefree atmosphere on set, forgetting about the impending political situation." — Starting with "But" looks a tad non-grammatical. Perhaps, "The cast and crew however admired Renoir and enjoyed the carefree atmosphere on set, forgetting about the impending political situation."?
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)


 * "Renoir arranged the blocking first then acted in the scenes" — What is "blocking"? Make it more clearer for those who may not be familiar with the term.
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)


 * "Jay pushed Renoir to finish location filming in Sologne and move the production to the sets built for it at the Pathé studios in Joinville." — Something simpler like "Jay pushed Renoir to finish filming in Sologne and move the production to sets erected at the Pathé studios in Joinville."
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Wikilink "B-roll footage" or add a sourced footnote explaining what it means if a wikilink is not available.
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)


 * "Film historian Gerald Mast said Gregor's performance was "as haunting and bewitching as a plastic giraffe."" — Can be rephrased as "Film historian Gerald Mast found Gregor's performance to be "as haunting and bewitching as a plastic giraffe.""
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)


 * "Overall the film was nine and a half weeks over schedule when in finally wrapped in June" — Can be rephrased as "The principal photography was nine and a half weeks over schedule when it was finally wrapped in June."
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)

Release

 * "Renoir later said he thought the film would be marketable." — Do you mean to say that Renoir believe that he could find commercial success instead of critical acclaim?
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)

Rediscovery

 * Couldn't find any fault here. Well-written.

Themes

 * "The Rules of the Game is remembered as a commentary on the moral callousness of the European upper class and their servants just before the beginning of World War II." — Is it present in reference #43? If not, do mention a reference/source for it.
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Richard Roud's quote can be explained rather than putting it as a big quote. Bergan's quote about the animals can be explained a bit as well.
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)

Style

 * "David Thomson said" — Mention who he is and on what topic/subject he is saying before stating "David Thomson said". :-)
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)

Legacy

 * David Thomson, Gerald Mast and Francois Truffaut are wikilinked again. Do remove the links (per WP:OVERLINK).
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Robert Altman.
 * Done.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 22:17, 28 November 2016 (UTC)


 * This section has a lot of "XX said XX" and "XX called the film XX". Try to make it more different for some of them who commented on the film more.
 * Worked on this. Maybe not exactly what you had in mind but I think its improved. Let me know what you think.--Deoliveirafan (talk) 03:26, 29 November 2016 (UTC)
 * A lot better. —  Ssven2  Speak 2 me 07:14, 29 November 2016 (UTC)