Talk:The Secret of the Unicorn/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 09:47, 5 February 2015 (UTC)

I will review the article. Looks good at first glance. — Ssven2  speak 2 me 09:47, 5 February 2015 (UTC)

Lead

 * Can you wikilink "francophone" (which I found out redirects to french language)?
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 12:28, 5 February 2015 (UTC)

Plot

 * "noonday sun" — isn't it spelt as "noonday sunne" in the book?
 * Quite correct. I was the one who added the words of the riddle to the article, and made other little changes to the riddle as well (e.g. I didn't capitalise nearly every other word as was done in the book). If the two of you decide a change is in order, that's fine; it would need to be changed in two places, but please note that my motivation for changing it was to help readability via WP:QUOTE": "Exceptions are: trivial spelling or typographical errors that obviously do not affect the intended meaning; these may be silently corrected." Your call. Prhartcom (talk) 19:50, 5 February 2015 (UTC)
 * I feel it is best to go by the book. — Ssven2  speak 2 me 09:23, 6 February 2015 (UTC)
 * , This is done. Prhartcom (talk) 20:46, 6 February 2015 (UTC)
 * "Barnaby asks to see Tintin" can be rephrased as "Barnaby requests a meeting with Tintin".
 * Agreed, and changed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 14:24, 5 February 2015 (UTC)
 * "a kleptomaniac who collects wallets." can be rephrased as "a kleptomaniac who has a penchant for collecting wallets." as Silk says in the book, he "adores" them.
 * I'm not so sure on this one; I'm concerned that that additional wording might be a bit superfluous. Midnightblueowl (talk) 14:24, 5 February 2015 (UTC)
 * "His cache of stolen wallets" — does cache mean "Treasure trove" as shown in its disambiguation page?
 * . See this. Obviously, as a term, it doesn't need a link... —Brigade Piron (talk) 12:41, 5 February 2015 (UTC)

Background

 * "was based upon Chevrny" — shouldn't it be "Château de Cheverny" as Cheverny is the name of the town and not the mansion.
 * Very good point. Changed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 13:24, 5 February 2015 (UTC)
 * "albeit with the two side wings removed." — this should actually be "albeit with the two outer wings removed" as there are four wings for the Château, two on each side.
 * Again, Changed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 13:24, 5 February 2015 (UTC)

Publication

 * "The first printing sold 30,000 copies in Francophone Belgium" — can you wikilink Francophone Belgium?
 * Done; I've linked it to French Community of Belgium. Midnightblueowl (talk) 12:28, 5 February 2015 (UTC)
 * At the risk of beating the proverbial dead horse, the French Community of Belgium =/= French-speaking Belgium. Brussels, which is majority francophone, is not included within it. To be honest, no link is probably the best option... —Brigade Piron (talk) 12:39, 5 February 2015 (UTC)