Talk:The Sioux Chef's Indigenous Kitchen

As a new Wikipedia editor, I appreciate the feedback! I've also written on Zakhx150's talk page, more extensively. Here I'll mention that I added the context paragraph in an attempt to address the concerns stated about undue weight -- my perception is that this cookbook is well within a mainstream opinion set about the need to return to healthier food, healthier eating, healthier agriculture, all of it. I'm interested in what others think! Thanks much. ClarityKTMpls (talk) 2:44, 5 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Hi . Thanks for responding to the feedback and for taking it on board and for adding in additional context - very useful. If I may, I'd like to make two requests to improve your article. Anything I quote here in blue text will refer to help pages and Wikipedia guidelines to help you out: Firstly that the lead section (the first paragraphs before the main body of the text) is now too long, so your additions should be moved into easier to use sub-sections below please - as a general rule of thumb try to keep the lead section to a few sentences. Breaking up the text like this just makes it easier for other people to read or to jump to the specific section they might be interested in. Secondly that there are a few direct quotes in this short article which aren't part of full sentences - use them sparingly, and make sure that they serve a purpose and keep the article neutral in perspective. That said thanks for being involved and working on the articles. Wikipedia is grateful. Zakhx150 (talk) 21:00, 6 January 2018 (UTC)

Changes made per these notes. It's my impression that the 'Undue Weight' tag has been addressed, so am removing. If anything further remains to be done, please advise. ClarityKTMpls (talk) 15:51, 11 February 2018 (UTC)