Talk:The Smeezingtons/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:48, 7 October 2014 (UTC)

Will leave some initial comments within 48 hours. I mainly focus on copyediting issues. Thanks! ☠ Jag  uar  ☠ 21:48, 7 October 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Lead

 * "including the ASCAP Pop Music Awards for Songwriters Ari Levine (from The Smeezingtons)" - somewhat confusing. Delete "from the Smeezingtons"?
 * "and the 2011 ASCAP Rhythm & Soul Music Awards for "Nothin' On You" as Top Rap Song" - the Top Rap Song?
 * Other than that the lead summarises the article well, complying per WP:LEAD and meeting the GA criteria

The issues raised have been adressed. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:35, 10 October 2014 (UTC)

Formation and early works

 * "He said that upon moving to L.A" - abbreviations should begin with their full name (Los Angeles)
 * "He said that upon moving to L.A. he was " - syntax error
 * "In 2008, Lawrence was an under-appreciated Los Angeles artist, Mars a struggling singer-songwriter - why was he under-appreciated? Sounds like original research
 * "They ventured into the US market," - should be U.S. (assuming this article uses American Spelling)

Notable collaborations
These issues raised have been addressed. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:44, 10 October 2014 (UTC)
 * "The Smeezingtons quickly landed the singles " - this shouldn't be in bold
 * Be careful of overlinking in this section. "...became another successful song for The Smeezingtons, reaching No. 1 in the United Kingdom" - United Kingdom is already linked in this section

Influences and style
Fixed. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:53, 10 October 2014 (UTC)
 * "In an article by American Songwriter" - should be italicised

On hold
This is a well written article, worthy of becoming GA. The only things standing in the way of it becoming GA are those copyediting and syntax issues I had mentioned above. The references appear fine and everything else almost meets the GA criteria. I'll put this on hold for seven days until those issues have been addressed. Thanks, ☠ Jag  uar  ☠ 13:08, 9 October 2014 (UTC)

Close - promoted
After seeing the improvements made to this article I think it now meets the GA criteria. It is overall well written, engaging and comprehensive. Long story short it is now a GA. Well done! ☠ Jag  uar  ☠ 18:22, 11 October 2014 (UTC)