Talk:The Sword/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Zeagler (talk) 11:28, 26 November 2010 (UTC)

Here's your expedited review...a month and a half late (sorry!)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * – This section is improved, but the issue remains. It would be great if there were more synthesis to obviate making a significant event out of announcements and reports: "The Sword spent (much of / mid-)2009 writing 'a concept album centered around an original science fiction narrative'..."
 * – Similarly, mentioning when the album title/song titles/album cover/single release dates/music video plans/tour dates became known doesn't really do anything to further our understanding of the band.
 * – "Just five shows into the opening leg of the Warp Riders Tour..." --> "...original drummer Trivett Wingo left the band, forcing the cancellation of the remainder of the tour." No need to convey tension by relating the effect before the cause, even if that was the order in which fans received the news.  Just keep in mind that this is an encyclopedia, an as such is supposed to lean towards dispassionate relating of the facts.  (In fairness, though, you do a fine job of that everywhere else in the article.)
 * – The six-sentence quote from the band about Wingo's departure could probably be condensed to three without losing any of the meaning, and doing so may make a fair use issue less likely to come up.
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Reviewer: Zeagler (talk) 11:28, 26 November 2010 (UTC)

Comment
There are dab links to be fixed and also two dead links. Jezhotwells (talk) 18:35, 28 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Taken care of. —Zeagler (talk) 18:02, 30 November 2010 (UTC)