Talk:The Tale of Mr. Tod/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer:  Aiken   &#9835;   19:07, 26 August 2010 (UTC)

Looking good. No big issues, just some minor points before I can promote:


 * Lead:

✅ I chose "The tale is about..." to rid the sentence of the "tee-tee" sound of "tale tells". Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)
 * "The tale tells of a badger..." I don't really like 'tale tells'. Story might be a good alternative.


 * Background:

✅ Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC) ✅ Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC) ✅ Rewritten. Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC) ✅ Rewritten. Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)
 * "Following the acquisition of Hill Top Farm in Lancashire..." I thought it was Cumbria? I'm assuming it used to be in Lancashire - this should be clarified.
 * The first sentence is three lines long. Consider splitting it up.
 * What is the "Peter Rabbit saga"? I mean, are the books a series, or just similar format by the same author?
 * Is "well-behaved people" a scare quote, or someone's words?


 * Plot:

✅ Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Seems a bit short for what was one of her longest stories.


 * General:

✅ For Potter, tale and story were two different things. She preferred tale. Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)
 * I've suggested you refer to Mr. Tod as a story. You've referring to it as a book and a tale. Whatever you use, be consistent and choose one.


 * Images:

✅ Deleted. Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Lots of pictures. It seems a bit crowded. Perhaps the pictures of the live animals could be removed, as they don't really add much imo.

✅ Deleted. Susanne2009NYC (talk) 17:26, 27 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Check the source info, at least one has a broken link.

Placing on hold.  Aiken   &#9835;   13:17, 27 August 2010 (UTC)


 * Passed.  Aiken   &#9835;   21:55, 27 August 2010 (UTC)