Talk:The Tortured Poets Department/GA2

GA Review
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Nominator: 05:57, 12 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: AskeeaeWiki (talk · contribs) 00:22, 26 May 2024 (UTC)

@Ippantekina I don't have much planned on Wikipedia, so for the meanwhile, I'm gonna review a Taylor Swift album. I have little to no experience regarding Taylor Swift, which is why I try to avoid editing these articles since I am not experienced in this matter enough. I think I'll be able to give some reviews with the background in about an hour, but I believe it will take me a few days to really finish reviewing, as I don't want to rush it. 𝘮𝘪𝘤𝘩𝘢𝘦𝘭'𝘴 𝘥𝘦𝘢𝘳 𝘮𝘦𝘭𝘢𝘯𝘤𝘩𝘰𝘭𝘺, 00:22, 26 May 2024 (UTC)


 * Thanks for reviewing this. Do ping me when you have comments :) Ippantekina (talk) 02:49, 27 May 2024 (UTC)


 * @Ippantekina, I wanted to apologize for my inactivity, I just graduated from middle school, so I was a little sidetracked. I'll start reviewing today. :) 𝘮𝘪𝘤𝘩𝘢𝘦𝘭'𝘴 𝘥𝘦𝘢𝘳 𝘮𝘦𝘭𝘢𝘯𝘤𝘩𝘰𝘭𝘺, 18:28, 31 May 2024 (UTC)
 * It's alright. Do ping me once the review is done so I'll resolve the comments in batch :) Ippantekina (talk) 01:33, 9 June 2024 (UTC)
 * All should be done now! Thanks again for the review :) Ippantekina (talk) 05:20, 19 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Great! Passed. Hopefully the delays in my review don't interfere with the Taylor Swift albums GT. 𝘮𝘪𝘤𝘩𝘢𝘦𝘭'𝘴 𝘥𝘦𝘢𝘳 𝘮𝘦𝘭𝘢𝘯𝘤𝘩𝘰𝘭𝘺, 19:18, 19 June 2024 (UTC)

Pre-Review
This is a pre-review, where I just look at some basic stuff such an copy violations.

Earwig results: Detected a "possible" violation with this article: [today.com/popculture/music/live-blog/taylor-swift-tortured-poets-department-live-updates-rcna148230] Not sure how to feel about this, as most of the "violations" are literally just repetitions of the song and album titles.

Authorship: Nominator has major contributions to the article. Pass.

Tightening
"...2017 album Reputation based..." –> "...2017 album, Reputation, based..."
 * I believe it might be sort of trivial to include the fact that her Eras Tour grossed a billion dollars. Although a great accomplishment, I do not think it relates much to the album in general.
 * Might be personal preference, but I recommend adding commas here:
 * "...who reported on Swift in association with the actor Joe Alwyn, the singer Matty Healy, and the football player Travis Kelce.", I suggest changing it to –> "...who reported on Swift's relationships with Joe Alwyn, Matty Healy, and Travis Kelce."
 * "In an Instagram post announcing the album's release ,"

Grammar

 * Pass.

Tightening

 * "...single "Fortnight" and the English indie rock band Florence and the Machine, led by the singer-songwriter Florence Welch, on the song "Florida!!!"..."
 * "expressed via varied themes such as delusion, anger, mourning, and death."

Grammar

 * Not really an error, but I suggest adding an "s" to "hyperbole". Both are acceptable as plural, so I won't mind if not done.

Tightening

 * "sonic approach to the sound of Swift's previous album Midnights."

Grammar

 * Pass.

Tightening

 * No tightening needed, passed.

Grammar

 * Not technically grammar, but since Swift's articles discourage usage of false-titles, add "the" before "American photographer Beth Garrabrant,"

Tightening

 * "Swift announced four physical editions, (add comma here) that were each titled after a corresponding bonus track..."

Grammar

 * Pass

Extra

 * Wikilink "Swifties" at "prompting Swifties to search..."

Grammar

 * Remove the "s" in PopMatters's
 * I don't think the semi-colon belongs here: "...and lyrical tonality as ambitious and tastefully experimental; Others, including Variety's Chris Willman..."

Tightening

 * Pass

Critical reception (Post-review commentary)

 * No need for tightening or grammar, but I suggest rewriting "writing that the unfavorable reviews were due to either that critics did not take that into account or that they did not allot enough listening time." into this: "writing that the unfavorable were due to critics not taking that into account or not allotting enough listening time."

Commercial performance

 * Pass, no need for grammar changes or tightening

Archiving
Sources 98, 99, 105, 139 and 141 should be archived

Authorship
'Pass'