Talk:The Voice Within/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:24, 9 November 2013 (UTC)

Background and release

 * "worldwide number-one hits" implies that the songs all went to #1 in every country.
 * Most of this section (all but the final two sentences) seems related to the concept of the album, rather than this song specifically. Is it needed here?
 * I've merged the section.

Recording and composition

 * File:The voice within (Radio edit).ogg should be cut to 25 s per WP:SAMPLE
 * There is some very close paraphrasing, particularly from
 * Is So So Gay a reliable source for music critique?
 * Epinions is user-generated, so is definitely unreliable.
 * Actually the album version of the song is 5 minutes, so I think 30 seconds is suitable here. Also, it's also only 65 kbps.

Reception

 * The first half of this section reads like a complete WP:QUOTEFARM. Try to paraphrase comments.

Music video

 * More very close paraphrasing from
 * ✅ I've cleaned up all &mdash; Simon (talk) 10:41, 13 November 2013 (UTC)

Track listings

 * Does "Pock It! CD single" mean mini CD? If so, you should probably use mini CD as that is clearer and is not a brand name.
 * ✅ It's truly a mini CD &mdash; Simon (talk) 03:49, 14 November 2013 (UTC)

Summary

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Some significant close paraphrasing. Also, I have carried out a fair amount of copyediting. In the future, please go over an article to make sure every sentence is clear and grammatically correct.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * Some sources used which are unreliable for music critique
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * The review is on hold until the comments above have been addressed. Adabow (talk) 08:26, 9 November 2013 (UTC)
 * OK, I am happy with the improvements made and am satisfied that the article meets the GA criteria now, and have listed the article. Adabow (talk) 07:37, 19 November 2013 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * The review is on hold until the comments above have been addressed. Adabow (talk) 08:26, 9 November 2013 (UTC)
 * OK, I am happy with the improvements made and am satisfied that the article meets the GA criteria now, and have listed the article. Adabow (talk) 07:37, 19 November 2013 (UTC)