Talk:The Web Planet/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: SL93 (talk · contribs) 02:29, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Lead

 * Pipe science fiction television to Science fiction on television.
 * Pipe BBC1 to BBC One.
 * Pipe bull ants to Myrmecia (ant).
 * Pipe free enterprise to free market.
 * Pipe stock music to production music.

Production

 * Pipe bull ants to Myrmecia (ant).
 * "unearthly musique concrète performances" - How were they unearthly?
 * "Moving house" does not sound encyclopedic. Same with "was on holiday" and "took around 30 minutes to don."
 * Pipe free enterprise to free market.
 * Pipe suits of armour to plate armour.

Filming

 * Pipe BBC Television Film Studios to Ealing Studios
 * "to accommodate for Hill's holiday" - What holiday?
 * "Fifteen bags of seaweed from Cornish Manures were requested for the fourth episode" - Why were they requested?

Broadcast and ratings

 * Pipe BBC Television Centre to Television Centre, London
 * Pipe BBC1 to BBC One.

Critical response

 * Pipe good versus evil to good and evil.
 * Pipe The Stage and Television Today to The Stage
 * Didn't should be did not.

Commercial releases

 * VHS doesn't need to be linked as a common term.
 * DVD doesn't need to be linked as a common term.
 * Pipe BBC DVD to 2 Entertain.
 * Pipe BBC Audio to AudioGO.
 * Pipe vinyl record to phonograph record.
 * Pipe Demon Records to Demon Music Group.
 * Pipe Frederick Muller Ltd to Hutchinson (publisher).

Discussion

 * Thank you for your review. Just a quick response to some of your comments:
 * Piped links are unnecessary per WP:NOTBROKE.
 * I'm not entirely sure what part of "took around 30 minutes to don" you find informal.
 * "Didn't" is part of a direct quote.
 * The duplicate link to stock music is permitted per MOS:DL, as it is part of a footnote.
 * I've the remainder of your concerns. Please let me know if there's anything else. –  Rhain  ☔ 04:52, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
 * It’s not that it’s informal, but that don is an old-fashioned word that isn’t used much and may not be understood by some readers. I won’t argue with you if you don’t want to change the wording due to it being correct. Sorry about the “didn’t” issue - I mixed up articles that I was reading today. As for the redirects, I was basing it off of other GA reviews and I now see that those were just nitpicking. SL93 (talk) 05:38, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I don't disagree that it's a tad old-fashioned, but I'm struggling to think of an alternative; I'd prefer the slightly outdated "don" than something as informal as "put on" or "get into". If you have any better suggestions, please let me know. – Rhain  ☔ 10:45, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
 * You have a good point. I will pass this GA this evening. I'm heading out the door now for work. Sorry about there being a wait. SL93 (talk) 13:27, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
 * No need to apologise. Thanks again for the review! – Rhain  ☔ 13:29, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Passing. SL93 (talk) 00:14, 7 January 2022 (UTC)