Talk:The Whale (The Office)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 04:19, 14 December 2012 (UTC)


 * I'll be glad to do this one. I'll start with a readthrough of the article in the next few days, noting initial issues here, and then I'll go to the checklist. Looking forward to working with you, -- Khazar2 (talk) 04:19, 14 December 2012 (UTC)

First pass
On first pass, this looks like very solid work, well-written and sourced.


 * I haven't followed the show since Season 3, so wasn't clear on this sentence: "Oscar thinks that Robert may be seeing another man besides him and convinces Angela to help her spy on him at his yoga class." Is Robert having an affair with Oscar? If so, perhaps the previous sentence could be rewritten as "Angela Lipton (Angela Kinsey) confides in Oscar Martinez (Oscar Nunez) that her husband, Robert (Jack Coleman)&mdash;who is secretly having a relationship with Oscar&mdash; is cheating on her".
 * "Ed Helms only appears in the cold open episode" -- should this read "in the episode's cold open"? If I understand right what we're talking about, you might link cold open for readers unfamiliar with the term.
 * I'm not familiar with how TV ratings should be written. Is the repetition of rating in "2.2 rating/6 percent rating" correct?

I'll now begin the checklist; take a look at these three items when you get a chance. -- Khazar2 (talk) 16:01, 14 December 2012 (UTC)

Checklist

 * I believe I have addressed all the issues that you noted. Thank you for taking the time to review this.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:04, 18 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Yep, that's a big pass. Thanks for all your work. -- Khazar2 (talk) 19:17, 18 December 2012 (UTC)