Talk:The sea in culture/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 13:33, 20 February 2015 (UTC)

Should have this to you within a day or two ☯ Jag  uar  ☯ 13:33, 20 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:52, 20 February 2015 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

 * Some little overlinking in the lead, I think cutting down on a couple of links wouldn't hurt, but it's up to you?
 * Removed overlinks for literature, Odyssey, poetry; unlinked psychiatrist.


 * "drawings on the walls of huts in Lamu[3]" - per WP:LEADCITE, citations are usually discouraged from the lead unless it's citing controversial information
 * Removed.


 * "the sea symbolizes the personal" - symbolises, if you plan on keeping this consistent with British English? It is mentioned again in the Symbolism, myth and legend section
 * Ok, done, I find myself (as a Brit) slipping into Oxford usage, which is allowed but confuses everyone!


 * "In modern times" - perhaps it would be better changing this to contemporary, as works from this paragraph include that from the early 1900s, which many people wouldn't consider this 'modern'?
 * Done.


 * Other than that, the lead summarises the article well, so this passes the GA criteria
 * Thanks.


 * "This happened widely among the ancient peoples living in lands bordering the Mediterranean Sea, and in India, China and other Southeast Asian nations" - two 'ands' in one sentence here, it would work fine with only one?
 * Done.


 * The Early modern section is quite short, is Shakespeare all that can be mentioned here?
 * Added Milton, Marvell, Waller. And a painting by Waterhouse.


 * "Herman Wouk writes that "Nobody, but nobody, could write about storms at sea like Conrad."" -full stop after the quotations
 * Done.


 * "Practices vary by country and by religion; for example, the USA allows" - United States
 * Done.

On hold
Very nice article as well as an interesting read. Those were all the prose issues I can find, otherwise most of it is looking like GA material already. I'll put this on hold for the standard seven days and once they're all addressed then it should be closer to passing the GAN. Thanks! ☯ Jag  uar  ☯ 16:40, 20 February 2015 (UTC)
 * @User:Jaguar: I've responded to all the comments so far. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:18, 20 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you addressing them so quickly, looks like we're good to go ☯  Jag  uar  ☯ 19:26, 20 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you for reviewing the article. Chiswick Chap (talk) 21:48, 20 February 2015 (UTC)