Talk:Thelma (1910 film)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 09:29, 20 April 2015 (UTC)


 * Info box
 * Could add a "Based on" parameter as it is based on a novel.


 * Lead
 * short drama produced → short drama film produced
 * The story was adapted from → Based on
 * Sir Phillip finds her there and the tricks is uncovered and the two embrace each other in love. → Sir Phillip searches for Thelma, ultimately finding her, uncovers the tricks which have been played on them and they fall back in love.


 * Plot
 * Thought → Though
 * I've never seen a plot or synopsis section made up entirely of two quotes. This needs to be for the most part paraphrased into original text and not so reliant on quotes.
 * This is the official plot because no other version exists which can possibly convey that which is shown. The movie is greatly shortened from the original work and with a >15 min run time the plot is a minute adaptation from the whole work. I've credited the original (and out of copyright) entirety from the official release that was published in the work as a result. Otherwise the plot would be impossible to be accurate - for almost no living person would have seen the film, much less recall it. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 17:27, 24 May 2015 (UTC)


 * Production
 * The story was adapted from the Thelma, → Thelma is a film adaptation of the novel of the same name,


 * Release and reception
 * and credits, the → and credits, and the
 * Tack the one line paragraph onto the end of the previous one, there's no point splitting it off like this and separating it with unnecessary white gaps.

Short and sweet article. On hold. — ₳aron  10:45, 26 April 2015 (UTC)
 * Outcome
 * - All fixes done. Sorry for the delay. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 17:25, 24 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Sorry I didn't see this. Passing. — Calvin999  08:09, 3 June 2015 (UTC)