Talk:Thelma Akana Harrison/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Indy beetle (talk · contribs) 07:07, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

I'll take this one, it looks interesting. Comments:

-Indy beetle (talk) 07:07, 4 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Lots of red links here. Not a demand on my part, but I suggest that either they are cut down or, hopefully, they turn blue in the near future.
 * In January 1944,The Honolulu Advertiser reported that she was "being urged" to run for Territorial Senate as a Republican Link Republican.
 * Aside from her victory, any information on her campaign worthy of inclusion? How many votes she got?
 * No need to repeatedly write "David Y. K. Akana" after his first mention in the body of the article.
 * Is it known where she was buried?


 * , thank you so much for pinking up this review!
 * I've removed the redlinks which might not be notable, and if I have time in the near future I'll work on making at least a stub for each of the remaining ones.
 * Linked Republican as suggested
 * Added some information about her campaign, including number of votes
 * Trimmed instances of "David Y. K. Akana" to "Senator Akana" after first mention in body
 * I haven't been able to find a source for where she was buried, but I'll keep trying!
 * -- ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 22:01, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

Source spotchecks:
 * "Mrs. Thelma Akana Announces Her Candidacy For Senate From Oahu". Honolulu Star-Bulletin. - All good here
 * "Succeeds Husband". Hawaii Tribune-Herald. - Good
 * Hill, Virginia Bennett (November 8, 1944). "Two Oahu Senate Seats Go To GOP". Hawaii Tribune-Herald. - Good

The sources seem to check out and, noting my satisfaction with the responses posted above, I'm passing the article. Good work. -Indy beetle (talk) 02:54, 5 September 2021 (UTC)