Talk:Theodosia Ivie/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Alanna the Brave (talk · contribs) 20:48, 10 January 2021 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this nomination. Comments to follow over the next few days! Alanna the Brave (talk) 20:48, 10 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Alrighty -- this article certainly meets some of the GA criteria: it's fairly broad in its coverage, the sole illustration is relevant and properly tagged, and the article seems adequately neutral and stable (some continuing changes, but no editing wars). Earwig's tool shows no online copy-vio problems. However, I have a number of concerns about prose/MOS, sourcing and citations, which also makes it difficult to fully assess the article for copy-vio issues or original research. I'll list my concerns below. I think these issues will likely require a substantial amount of time and effort to address, so I've decided to fail this nomination. I encourage the nominator to keep working on the article -- they may also wish to consider a peer review in future, before re-nominating. Alanna the Brave (talk) 00:28, 17 January 2021 (UTC)

Prose/MOS

 * The lead section should be expanded to more fully summarize the main points of the article -- right now, it's very short and focuses primarily on one of Ivie's land disputes in her later years. There's definitely other info that could be included.
 * Currently, the sections of Ivie's life are not presented chronologically. We jump into "Land disputes" without any helpful background knowledge about Ivie, and then gradually go backwards in time, which is confusing. The "Portrayal in fiction" section also appears before the actual end of Ivie's life story ("Downfall"), which doesn't entirely make sense. I recommend restructuring the article by beginning with Ivie's family and early life, then progressing onwards from there (and putting "Portrayal in fiction" at the very end).
 * Throughout the article, I'm seeing enormous paragraphs, which may make it more difficult for readers to locate information. The paragraphs should be better broken up to separate different topics.