Talk:There Comes Papa/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Qono (talk · contribs) 00:01, 18 December 2018 (UTC)

I'm looking forward to reviewing this article! Qono (talk) 00:01, 18 December 2018 (UTC)

Background

 * "The cultural creation of a new morality, coupled in addition to legal infringements, required a redefinition of the once polyandrous and matrilocal system of kinship."

This sentence is unclear. If this remains true to the intended meaning, perhaps rewrite as:
 * "Due to shifting morals and newly passed laws, the once polyandrous and matrilocal system of kinship were redefined."

Qono (talk) 00:27, 18 December 2018 (UTC)

GA corrections
Thank you for reviewing the article. Does the corrected revision look good? BBuddy (talk) 15:15, 18 December 2018 (UTC)


 * Looks good, but I'm going to ask for a second opinion on 3a. Qono (talk) 21:59, 18 December 2018 (UTC)
 * I've addressed your concern for 3a and expanded some more on the techniques that the artist used and more on the exhibition (including where it is currently held). I can add more on anything else, but I am careful not to go off topic. Can you give it a look if possible?BBuddy (talk) 19:11, 19 December 2018 (UTC)
 * With these changes, I think this passes the criteria. Thank you! Qono (talk) 21:01, 19 December 2018 (UTC)
 * Thank you for taking the time to review, I really appreciate it! BBuddy (talk) 21:04, 19 December 2018 (UTC)