Talk:Thiruvarur/GA1

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Reviewer: TheSpecialUser (talk · contribs) 11:05, 4 November 2012 (UTC)

It has been ages since I ever did a good review of any GA nom. My last 10 have been quick fails and it was primarily due to my lack of time, however, I'm going to get fully active from 10 Nov and just to warm myself up, I thought of starting this review. I'll give the review in 2 days. Cheers!  TheSpecialUser TSU 11:05, 4 November 2012 (UTC)

Lead

 * Please remove Tamil: திருவாரூர் as it was decided on the talk of WP:IND that not to use such text in the article. Please use IUPA name instead. (Example Ahmedabad)


 * The note has been kept like a - can you please add [] and make it [a]


 * is a town and a municipality in - is a town and municipality in


 * as well as the annual chariot festival held in the month of April - and the annual chariot festival held in the month of April


 * The temple chariot, weighing 300 tonne and measuring 90 feet tall is the largest largest temple chariots in Tamil Nadu - What is Temple chariot? Thyagaraja temple? Please clarify in the lead as it is not clear


 * The Kamalalayam tank located outside the temple occupies an area of 33 acres and is one of the largest temple tanks in Tami Nadu. - too much weighty. Please remove from the lead


 * Thiruvarur was made the headquarters of - Thiruvarur became the headquarters of


 * well-connected - kind of POV unless any sources says it and if sources says well-connected, add "" - you can always change it to Roadways are the major means of transportation with a total of 94.06 km of roads in the town as well as it is connected by three national highways.


 * first grade municipality - whats the difference between first grade and normal municipality?
 * ✅ - it is based on revenue criteria - linked.


 * centre of the town.[1] The town covers - The town and then again the town. make it - centre of the town.[1] Thiruvarur covers


 * The town is administered by a first grade municipality. - It is administered by a first grade municipality.


 * Thanjavur district - this should be linked only once in the lead. It is linked 3 time at present
 * ✅ - other multi linking is also removed.


 * Thiruvarur was a part of Thanjavur District till 1991 and Nagapattinam District until 1997. Thiruvarur was made the headquarters of Thiruvarur District when it was carved out of Nagapattinam district in 1997. - Thiruvarur was a part of Thanjavur district till 1991 and Nagapattinam district till 1997; it became the headquarters of Thiruvarur district when it was carved out of Nagapattinam district.


 * Thiruvarur was a part of Thanjavur District - Thiruvarur was a part of Thanjavur district


 * and Nagapattinam District until 1997 - and Nagapattinam district until 1997.


 * of Thiruvarur District when it was carved - of Thiruvarur district when it was carved


 * 10.47 km2 - please use convert for this.


 * 300 tonne - use convert


 * 90 feet - same as above


 * Add WP:ALT in the image of infobox by using the action:  | alt = 
 * alt is there in image_alt


 * — town  — -> —  Town  —

Etymology

 * The historic name of the city was - The historic name of the town was (please be consistent throughout the article with the use of either "town" or "city")


 * 7th century saiva canonical work, Tevaram. [3] - remove the space after full-stop.


 * Aaroor and it finds mention in the 7th - Aaroor (Arur) and it finds mention in the 7th - this is because you used the term arur later in the section.


 * as per the municipal website. - as per the municipal corporation.


 * Another name of Thiruvarur is Kamalayaksetra, meaning the "holy place that is an abode of lotuses".[4] The place is also referred so due to the presence of the Kamalayayam tank and the temple deity being Kamalambigai.[4] - Another name of Thiruvarur is Kamalayaksetra, meaning the "holy place that is an abode of lotuses"; the town is also referred so due to the presence of the Kamalayayam tank and the temple deity, Kamalambigai.[4]


 * During the British times - During the British raj - also link British raj


 * After independence, the city was termed Tiruvarur. - termed by who?
 * ✅ - removed - out of place.


 * The Tiruvarur district retains the name - you have used Thiruvarur district in the lead so this is way too confusing
 * ✅ - reworded


 * Ref needed for the last two lines of the section


 * During the British times, the city was termed Tiruvalur,[5] Tiruvaloor,[6] and Thiruvalur[7]. - During the British times, the city was termed Tiruvalur,[5] Tiruvaloor,[6] and Thiruvalur.[7]

History

 * Thiruvarur is mentioned as the capital city of a legendary Chola king, Manu Needhi Cholan, who is believed to have killed his own son to provide justice to a cow. - remove the extra thing which gets covered up in the parent article and few tweaks which will formulate - Thiruvarur is known as the capital city of the Chola king, Manu Needhi Cholan.
 * ✅ - legendary and main sequence retained, others reworded.


 * The removed part gets covered in the next sentence from His name has since then been used as a metaphor for fairness and justice in Tamil literature and Tamil culture to Cholan, according to a folk, is believed to have killed his own son to provide justice to a cow; thus, his name has been used as a metaphor for "fairness and justice" in Tamil literature and Tamil culture
 * ✅ - reworded.


 * Thiruvarur was one of the five traditional capitals of the Chola empire.[10] The history of Thiruvarur revolves around the Thygarajaswamy temple.[11] - Thiruvarur was one of the five traditional capitals of the Chola empire,[10] and the history of the town revolves around the Thygarajaswamy temple.[11]


 * during when the town emerged a centre of saivism - during which the town emerged as the centre of saivism


 * After the fall of Cholas during the reign of Rajendra Chola II, the town was caught under a power struggle between Pandyas and Hoysalas during the 13th century CE - After the fall of Cholas during the reign of Rajendra Chola II in the 13th century CE, the town was caught under a power struggle between Pandyas and Hoysalas


 * in a failure attempt to search for treasure. - in a failed attempt to discover hidden treasures.


 * Six brahmins of the temple, suspected to be spies, were killed in an encounter - During the attempt six brahmins of the temple, suspected to be spies, were killed in an encounter - If I'm not misunderstood and if the encounter is about something other then the treasure hunt event, please clarify there
 * ✅ added British spies.


 * After independence, Thiruvaur continued to be a part of the Thanjavur District till 1991 and Nagapattinam District until 1997. - After independence, Thiruvaur continued to be a part of the Thanjavur district and Nagapattinam district till 1991 and 1997 respectively.


 * Thiruvarur District when it was carved out of Nagapattinam district in 1997 - Thiruvarur district when it was carved out of Nagapattinam district in 1997


 * Unlink Thiruvarur district, Nagapattinam district and Tevaram per WP:OVERLINK. They can be linked if covered later in the article but not right after being linked in the lead or in the section above.


 * Ref needed for the last two lines in the section


 * The town was briefly captured by French troops under Lally - The town was briefly captured by French troops led by Lally


 * The province was annexed by British along with Tanjore after a failure attempt by the French to attack the Raja of Tanjore - The province and Tanjore were annexed by British after the failed attempt of the French to attack the King of Tanjore


 * to Nataraja of Chidambaram temple. - to the Nataraja of Chidambaram temple.


 * In the image, "the most important landmark" needs ref


 * located at Thanjavur - remove this as it is covered in the linked article.

Geography

 * A separate sub-section is needed for "climate" and a Weather box is to be added too.


 * The town is bounded by Sukumar river in the north, Valaiyar river in the south and Odambokki river passing through the centre of the town. - The town is bounded by Sukumar river in the north, Valaiyar river in the south while the Odambokki river flows through the centre.


 * The town has an average elevation of 3 metres (9 ft). - The town has an average elevation of 3 metres (9 ft) from the sea level.


 * 3 metres (9 ft). - use convert (metres is wrong and it should be meter)


 * 10.47 km - use convert


 * Thiruvarur is situated at a distance of 300 km from Chennai, 24 km from Nagapattinam, 29 km from Nagore, 40 km from Karaikal, 40 km from Mayiladuthurai, 40 km from Kumbakonam, 56 km from Thanjavur, 27 km from Mannargudi and 28 km from Thiruthuraipoondi - way too much so trim a bit and keep only prominent places (not more then 5)


 * 1100 and 1260 mm - use convert


 * The town has a tropical climate during the summer months of March to May. - The town experiences tropical climate during summer; from March to May.


 * The proximity to sea results in a high humidity throughout the year and reaches 70% during August to May - The proximity to sea results in high humidity throughout the year and peaks 70% from August to May - from August to May? Really?
 * ✅ -Yes - reference says so.


 * located at 9.28°N 79.3°E[13] - full-stop is needed


 * link alluvial soil


 * Paddy is the major crop in the region followed by black gram, green gram, ground nut and gingely - Paddy is the major crop while the others being black gram, green gram, ground nut and gingely

The Thyagaraja Temple

 * Way too much is in this. Please trim it down to merely one paragraph as this article is about the town and not the temple.


 * Remove main article as the temple is linked many times


 * Move this section and make it a sub-section of "Culture"

Demographics

 * As of the 2001 India census, - As of the census of India 2001,


 * The decadal growth rate was higher in decade ending 1981 due to increased provision of social, economic and recreational facilities that attracted rural to urban migration - The population growth rate was higher during the 1981 decade due to increased provision of social, economic and recreational facilities that caused the rural population to migrate to urban.


 * The overall growth rate has declined over the period due to poor returns in agriculture and increased migration of agricultural labourers to other urban centres. - The overall growth rate had declined over the last two decades due to poor returns in agriculture and increased migration of agricultural labourers to other urban centres.


 * Thiruvarur has an average literacy rate of 81%, higher than the national average of 59.5%: male literacy is 85%, and female literacy is 75%. - Thiruvarur has an average literacy rate of 81%: male literacy is 85%, and female literacy is 75%. The rate is higher than the national average of 59.5%


 * The literacy rate is high as of 2001 or 2011 or 1981?


 * Is the literacy rate of India really 59.5% at present?


 * The population density of the town is high in the centre and lower in the peripheral areas. - The population density of the town is high in the centre and low in the peripheral regions.


 * As per a survey conducted in 1997 - conducted by who?


 * 10% of the population is under 6 years of age. - please do not start a sentence with a numbe


 * The part of consensus of 2011 regarding the population should come right after you finish with 2001.


 * As of 2011 census, b the population - As of 2011 census of India,b the population


 * trading activities[32] - full-stop needed


 * 45% are dependent population. - what does dependent population mean? Please clarify in the article
 * ✅ - removed.


 * Term Working population is vague - please use something better like Wage earning population or Employed population


 * About 33% population of the town in involved in agriculture, majority of whom are - About 33% population of the town is involved in agriculture and most of them are


 * 12.7% are involved in primary occupation like agriculture, 2.8% in secondary occupation like industries and 85% in teritiary occupation like agricultural trading and tourism. - 12.7% are involved in primary occupations like agriculture, 2.8% in secondary occupations related to industries and 85% in teritiary occupations such as agricultural trading and tourism.

Economy

 * and surrounding areas is agriculture - and surrounding regions is agriculture


 * More than 70% of the workforce is involved in agriculture with 14% being cultivators and rest agricultural laboureres. - More than 70% of the workforce is involved in agriculture; 14% are cultivators while the rest are laboureres.


 * Paddy is cultivated in three seasons namely Kurvai, Samba and Thaladi - Please link them if possible. And do add the months from when the seasons began in brackets


 * Due to discontinuity in the working days, the labourers migrate to other states like Gujarat and Kerala and also to other professions like construction industry in urban centres and textile industry in Tiruppur. - Due to the discontinuity in the working days, the labourers migrate to other states like Gujarat and Kerala. They also shift to other professions like construction industry in the urban centres and textile industry in the district.


 * There are no industrial estates in the town and the district, while a proposal to form one at Vaippur village is in progress. - In progress as of?
 * ✅ - reworded.


 * There are no of co-operative societies to acquire the farm produce and the District Purchasing Centre, operated by the government of Tamil Nadu is the major procurer - There are no co-operative societies who acquire the farm products and the District Purchasing Centre, operated by the government of Tamil Nadu is the major procurer - If I'm not mistaken. And if I'm please re-phrase the current version

Transport

 * Most of the buses via Thiruvarur operated by the corporation ply between Trichy and Velankanni. - Most of the buses via Thiruvarur are operated by the corporation ply between Trichy and Velankanni.


 * in the municipal bus stand of Thiruvarur. - in the municipal bus stand of the town.


 * The State Express Transport Corporation operates long distance buses connecting Thiruvarur to Bangalore, Thiruvanathapuram and Marthandam - The State Express Transport Corporation operates long distance buses connecting the town to Bangalore, Thiruvanathapuram and Marthandam


 * Gauge conversion between Mayiladuthurai and Thiruvarur completed in August 2012 and the inaugural train was run between Bangalore and Nagore passing via Thiruvarur. - Gauge conversion between Mayiladuthurai and Thiruvarur was completed in August 2012 and the inaugural train ran from Bangalore to Nagore via Thiruvarur.


 * passenger Trains - passenger trains


 * triweekly - what does that mean? please use something which is clear


 * trains from Mannargudi to Tirupathi and Velankanni to Goa that passed via Thiruvarur. - trains from Mannargudi to Tirupathi and Velankanni to Goa that pass through Thiruvarur.


 * The nearest Airport is Tiruchirapalli Airport which is about 110 km. - 110 km from where?


 * 110 km - use convert


 * Remove the space between last second line and the ref

Education and utility services

 * Thiruvarur has a lower literacy rate compared to other part of the state - Need to add the year about which you are talking - 2001 ? 2011?


 * three Government high schools - three government high schools


 * an Act of Parliament in 2009 - an act of Parliament in 2009 - act should not be capitalised unless it is included in the name (e.g., Rowlet Act)


 * There are 5 other arts - There are five other arts


 * 3 polytechnic colleges - three polytechnic colleges


 * Electricity supply to the town is regulated and distributed by the Thiruvarur circle of Tamil Nadu Electricity Board (TNEB). - Electricity is supplied and regulated by the Thiruvarur circle of Tamil Nadu Electricity Board (TNEB).


 * river – the distribution through water tanks located at - river; the distribution through water tanks located at
 * 42.6 lakhs litres - use convert


 * About 18 metric tonnes of solid waste are collected from - About 18 metric tonnes of solid waste is collected from


 * 18 metric tonnes - use convert


 * - the town every day from the town - the town everyday


 * provides broadband internet service[57] - full-stop needed


 * 3 government hospitals - 3 government hospitals


 * in the town, with the largest being the District Head Quarters Government Hospital. - in the town; largest of them is the District Head Quarters Government Hospital.

Municipal Administration and politics

 * The title - Municipal Administration and politics - Municipal administration and politics


 * Until 1860 it was a head quarters of a separate taluk. - Until 1860 Thiruvarur was a headquarters of a separate taluka.


 * Link taluka


 * Thiruvarur was declared a third grade municipality in 1914 during British times. - It was declared a third grade municipality in 1914 during British times. - usually "it" is not used in the first line but the name so...


 * revenue villages namely Vilamal, Vijayaruram, Thiruvarur south, Thiruvarur North, Keelakavadhukudi, Ramage, Sundaravilakam and Kidaramkondan. - revenue villages; Vilamal, Vijayaruram, Thiruvarur south, Thiruvarur north, Keelakavadhukudi, Ramage, Sundaravilakam and Kidaramkondan.


 * General administration/personnel, Engineering, Revenue, Public Health, Town planning and IT. - general administration/personnel, engineering, revenue, public health, town planning and IT.


 * Please use full-form of IT


 * under the control of a Municipal Commissioner who is the supreme executive head. - under the control of a Municipal Commissioner who is the executive head.


 * {!xt|The town became the district head quarters since January 1997 }} - The town became the district headquarters from January 1997


 * when the Thiruvarur district was created as a separate district. - when the Thiruvarur was made a separate district.


 * Use full name of M. Karunanidhi


 * Use full name of V. Ravichandran
 * Use full name of K. Saravanan
 * Use full name of D. Senthil
 * Use full name of A.K.S. Vijayan
 * dont have full name of these people. EC/municipal website list them as above.


 * by the Indian National Congress for 4 times during - by the Indian National Congress for four times during


 * headed by a Deputy Superintendent of Police. - headed by a Deputy Superintendent.


 * an all women police station - an all-women police station

Culture

 * Thiruvarur, historically has been a centre of eminent people in religion, arts and science. - Historically Thiruvarur has been a centre of eminent people in religion, arts and science.


 * Sundarar - full name please
 * Full name is Sundarar.


 * Muthuswami Dikshitar has sung praises of the temple deities of the Thyagarajaswami temple. - Muthuswami Dikshitar had sung eulogies of the temple deities in the Thyagarajaswami temple.