Talk:This Used to Be My Playground/GA1

GA Review
Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 00:23, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 00:23, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

Infobox
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 * The single cover image needs an alt

Paragraph 1
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 * Remove the extra space in between "song" and "by"
 * Add "recorded" in between "song" and "by"

Paragraph 2
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 * The statement about "making the song sound seamless" sounds like an opinion rather than a fact
 * "Lyrically it talks..." → "Lyrically it discusses..."
 * What do you mean by "an abrupt ending"?

Paragraph 3
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 * "Billboard Hot 100. The track was..." → "Billboard Hot 100; the track was..."

Paragraph 1
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 * What does "president present music supervisor" mean?
 * "helped them chose..." → "helped them choose..."

Paragraph 3
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 * I would refrain from starting a new paragraph/sentence with "However"; instead I would remove "However" and capitalized the 'D' in "due"
 * Otherwise good work :)

Paragraph 2
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 * I think if you added "an" before "accompaniment of strings" in the audio file, it would flow better

Paragraph 3
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 * Shouldn't it be "be my playground / this used to..." instead of "be my playground, this used to..."?

Paragraph 1
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 * "Upon release," → "After its release,"
 * After reading the rest of these reviews, I'd go as far as saying "After its release, "This Used to Be My Playground" received critical acclaim from music critics."

Paragraph 2
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 * "number 32 of his list..." → "number 32 on his list..."

Paragraph 3
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 * In the first sentence, shouldn't the period come before the quotation mark?

Paragraph 1
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 * Insert "for" before "the week of July 4, 1992."
 * Other than that, this section looks fantastic

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 * This first sentence is long; could it be broken apart into two smaller sentences?

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 * Could a side by side image comparison, comparing this music video to the music video for "To Be Reborn" be included? Wouldn't this establish a better understanding of the latter paragraph?

End of GA Review:
One of the best articles I've ever reviewed. Just a few corrections and rewordings and the article shall pass. Thanks again. Carbrera (talk) 22:32, 1 April 2016 (UTC)


 * Carbrera, I've fixed all the points you have commented. I'm currently working on creating a side-by-side image comparisons for the music video sections. I'll upload it soon. If you have anymore comments, do let me know and I'll gladly fix them. Thank you so much for your wonderful review!! --Chrishm21 (talk) 16:15, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
 * please don't upload a music video screenshot. It will not pass WP:NFCC due to the actual image not passing WP:NFCC. I was responding to Carbrera's comment and explaining why the image is not suitable since it is something replaceable by words. Everyone knows how a photo album looks like. — I B  [ Poke  ] 16:21, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
 * OK ! ;) --Chrishm21 (talk) 16:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Sorry for the long interval; I have read through all of the changes. Thanks; it was nice working with you guys. Carbrera (talk) 01:19, 3 April 2016 (UTC)