Talk:Thunder (mascot)/Archive 1

Pre-FAC review
I think I'd like to put this article up for FAC, so anyone watchlisting this article (or invited here) feel free to comment below! Montanabw (talk) 06:15, 13 February 2014 (UTC)


 * As a non-horse person having read this article a couple of times, these thoughts come to mind.


 * I'd link "gray horse", not just "gray" horse in the lead. I didn't understand what was relevant about a "gray" colored horse turning white until I read the "gray horse" article. A bit of clarity here for the non-horse person might be useful.
 * done --Montanabw


 * In the first paragraph of Mascot duties, call a spade a spade. Replace manure with feces since manure implies so many more things. (unless this is accepted horse PC).
 * It IS horse PC, there's so much plant matter in them that they are almost manure when they drop. LOL!  --Montanabw


 * I found the excessive use of the third person pronoun "He" and pronoun "Who" to be a bit creepy. Kind of makes it read like the horse does all this stuff on his own. --Mike Cline (talk) 16:49, 13 February 2014 (UTC)


 * On one hand, saying "is trained to" or "is asked to" over and over also starts to sound weird. But, to some extent he sort of does stuff at least because he's OK with it (grin), but we are also talking about a sentient creature, same as a dog or cat ... maybe flag the ones that are freaking you out the most?  (FWIW, some horse magazines have guidelines that insist that you must never call a horse an "it.'  Just saying... ;-)  ) --MTBW

Thanks Mike, any other comments are welcome. Hidden text remarks also Ok, I'll toss as read or fixed. Montanabw (talk) 03:32, 14 February 2014 (UTC)