Talk:Tim Foli/GA1

GA Reassessment
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This article has been reviewed as part of WikiProject Good articles/Project quality task force in an effort to ensure all listed Good articles continue to meet the Good article criteria. In reviewing the article, I have found there are a number of issues that need to be addressed.
 * It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * The prose is not great, maybe a 4/10. It is too emotive and judgemental for encyclopedia standards and needs to be brought dback to NPOV standards. It is also shaky grammatically and there are a number of short paragraphs that need to be expanded.--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:17, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
 * The lead does not do an adequate job of introducing Tim Foli - list some career highlights and notable things he has done to expand it a bit more.
 * Overview section is in the wrong place -put it at the end of the article, not the beginning.--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:17, 7 October 2008 (UTC)


 * It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * Severe referencing problems, I have highlighted the worst ones with tags in the article.--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:17, 7 October 2008 (UTC)


 * It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
 * "Foli was known as a fiery player who was a reliable fielder, but only an average hitter." - Unless this is a direct quote (in which case it must be sourced), this is an unreliable judgement in the very first sentence.
 * "Foli's dubious record", "His free swinging did not aim for the fences, however", "Foli hit well when it counted most" - all unsourced commentary in the first paragraph.
 * More examples of unsourced or unexplained commentary: "Foli posted decent numbers", "was a typical season for Foli", "as well as other intangibles, dropped from World Champions to mediocrity", "when his fiery personality made news." I haven't got them all, so do a thorough sweep through the article.
 * "At age seventeen, Foli started out poorly" - How so? explain.


 * It is stable.
 * It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
 * a (tagged and captioned): b (lack of images does not in itself exclude GA):  c (non-free images have fair use rationales):
 * No images. They aren't essential, but would certainly improve the article substantially.--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:17, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
 * No images. They aren't essential, but would certainly improve the article substantially.--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:17, 7 October 2008 (UTC)

I will check back in no less than seven days. If progress is being made, the article will remain listed as a Good article. Otherwise, it may be delisted (such a decision may be challenged through WP:GAR). If improved after it has been delisted, it may be nominated at WP:GAN again. Feel free to drop a message on my talk page if you have any questions, and many thanks for all the hard work that has gone into this article thus far. Regards--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:17, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Overall:
 * a Pass/Fail:


 * This has been up here for two weeks, notifications have been made and still no work. This is no longer a GA, I'm sorry.--Jackyd101 (talk) 15:41, 23 October 2008 (UTC)