Talk:Timothy Brosnahan/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 05:04, 8 August 2023 (UTC)

Heyo! I will review this within one week.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 05:04, 8 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Nice work! Your fast response is also greatly appreciated. I am now happy to pass this article for GA status. Congrats!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 20:32, 11 August 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check
Earwig says good to go.

File(s)
The only image is good, relevant and has a valid public domain rationale.

Prose

 * Recommend opening § Early life with his full name as it is his first mention in the body.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  21:27, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "Brosnahan lived and began his education, briefly attending two private schools" sounds a bit 'rushed'/out of place for me. Is it perhaps possible to incorporate the Brosnahan surviving line into the previous sentence and clarifying when (if known) he briefly attended two private schools?
 * I've reworded for a smoother transition. I cannot determine when he attended those schools.  Ergo Sum  21:38, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "He transferred to Gonzaga College in 1869" – wikilink Gonzaga College.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  21:27, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Do the sources say why his application was denied?
 * They do not.  Ergo Sum  21:28, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "Afterwards" – do we know when he left Woodstock College?
 * The sources do not say, but from my background knowledge, I infer that it was part of the normal course of Jesuit formation.  Ergo Sum  21:28, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "At the time, he was the first" – "at the time" is not really necessary here.
 * Removed.  Ergo Sum  21:29, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "He introduced coverage of modern subjects" open with "Brosnahan introduced" to avoid a repetition of he with the previous and next sentences. Also:
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  21:29, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Can some context perhaps be given on these so-called modern subjects?
 * The source does not go into detail but I have reworded from "modern" to "contemporary" for clarity.  Ergo Sum  21:39, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "and was ordained a priest in 1887" – should be "that same year" as 1887 was just mentioned.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  21:30, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "Georgetown organized" – comma after Georgetown.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  21:30, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "the number of students enrolled increased to 450" – from?
 * I added the closest reference point I could find.  Ergo Sum  21:36, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Can we have translation for Adversaria ethica in ordinem redacta?
 * I've added a translation in the reference to this book in the Further reading section, but as I cannot find any authoritative translation of the title (that is, not my own), I have avoided adding one to the body of the article.  Ergo Sum  21:42, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * That is fair!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 16:47, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "article by the Charles William Eliot" – no way, the Charles William Eliot?! remove the.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  21:36, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Should it not be "remaining there for more than one month"? Apologies if this is only a British English thing (which I write in).
 * It does not seem to be an AmEng vs. BrEng question to me, but for sake of clarity, I have heeded your suggestion.  Ergo Sum  21:37, 9 August 2023 (UTC)

Refs

 * Woodstock Letters 1897 and 1916 and Devitt 1935 appear to all be dead URLs.
 * I have replaced the dead links with new ones.  Ergo Sum  15:10, 11 August 2023 (UTC)

Passes spotcheck on refs 10, 11, 14, 18, 21 and 30.