Talk:Titanium (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wikipedian Penguin (talk · contribs) 12:40, 20 November 2011 (UTC)

The article is on hold. — WP: PENGUIN  · [ TALK ]  12:40, 20 November 2011 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * " featuring vocals from Australian recording artist Sia " → " featuring vocals by Australian recording artist Sia "
 * " Production for the song was also handled by Guetta, Tuinfort and Afrojack "
 * " as part of the iTunes Store's countdown to the album's release " — Not necessary
 * " Musically, "Titanium" is a ballad which draws from the genres of pop, house and urban-dance. "
 * " The song features lyrics about inner strength. " — Is it really a feature? Features are extras, not the core topic of the song.
 * " Critical reception towards the song was generally positive, with critics noting " → " Critics were positive towards the song was generally positive and noted "
 * " It was also a top twenty hit " — Hyphen between top and twenty.
 * ✅ Oz  talk  22:22, 20 November 2011 (UTC)


 * Background
 * " Production for the song was also handled by Guetta, Tuinfort and Afrojack. "
 * " Guetta hand-picked her " — Informal.
 * " whose version of the song leaked online in July 2011 " — Link "leaked online" to Internet leak.
 * " In October 2011, it was revealed that American pop singer Katy Perry was the first person to be offered the track but turned it down. " — Cut it down to " American pop singer Katy Perry was the first person to be offered the track but turned it down. " and move it so that the events are listen in chronological order.
 * ✅ Oz  talk  22:22, 20 November 2011 (UTC)


 * Composition
 * " which draws from the genres " → " that draws from the genres "
 * PopCrush is one word.
 * " Other critics called them "square-peg"[15] and compared her vocals to those by Fergie. " — Who are these "other critics"? State.
 * ✅ Oz  talk  22:22, 20 November 2011 (UTC)


 * Critical reception
 * " A writer for Samesame.com.au also agreed calling it the "best cut" on the album " — Comma after "agreed".
 * " "'Titanium' sees Guetta giving the Australian songstress some long overdue commercial appeal, while Sia's vocals bring a quirky twist to an otherwise fairly straight up, urban-dance record." " — Paraphrase some of that quote; it's too long.
 * ✅ Oz  talk  03:47, 21 November 2011 (UTC)


 * Chart performance
 * " It has since peaked at number five and was certified platinum by the Australian Recording Industry Association (ARIA) " — Tense inconsistency.
 * " In Austria, "Titanium" debuted at number three on the Austrian Singles Chart,[30] and at number nine on the French Singles Chart " — The French Singles Chart isn't in Austria.
 * " "Titanium" was also a top twenty hit in Belgium "
 * ✅ Oz  talk  22:22, 20 November 2011 (UTC)


 * References
 * PopCrush is one word.
 * FN 22: Dallas Voice in italics.
 * All newspaper refs use cite news. Everything else in this article should use cite web.
 * BBC refs do not have their publisher parenthesized.
 * ✅ Oz  talk  22:22, 20 November 2011 (UTC)

Great work; passing! — WP: PENGUIN  · [ TALK ]  11:34, 21 November 2011 (UTC)