Talk:Title (album)/GA1

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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 06:28, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

I'll get to this within a few days Snuggums (talk / edits) 06:28, 1 May 2015 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * If I'm gonna be honest, it's simpler and cleaner to just say this is her fourth album in opening sentence
 * recording artist → singer
 * Let's specify that it replaced the Title EP on iTunes
 * Deluxe edition and track count don't need to be mentioned here
 * All the parts calling this a debut album should be removed as quite misleading since she previously released three albums before this
 * "commenced on February 11, 2015" reads awkwardly, and I'm not sure if the exact date is needed


 * Production
 * See above note on calling this a "debut album"
 * When did Trainor begin working on this record?
 * No mention of her previous three albums?
 * "her singing being weaker" is POV
 * "Speaking to USA Today she said" → "She told USA Today"
 * Not sure if "improve her vocal strength" is neutral
 * Something about "Trainor said on October 7, that the album was made up of 14 tracks, 10 of which were co-written and produced by Kadish" doesn't read well


 * Writing and inspiration
 * No need to mention Beyoncé's nationality
 * From "However, in February 2014, Trainor was signed to Epic Records by chairman L.A. Reid", I'd put the time range at the end of this bit
 * I don't see anything in FN19 (The Guardian) explicitly mentioning Trainor's own self image, so where did this come from? A contentious claim like this must be resourced or removed immediately per WP:BLP
 * "she wanted to make a statement" → "she wanted to state"
 * There is nothing in FN23 (Billboard) that explicitly indicates she was previously "mishandled" in relationships; please resource or remove this right away per WP:BLP
 * "Recorded on August 19, 2014, 'Lips Are Movin' served as a late addition to Title" is not supported by FN5 (USA Today); resource or remove this


 * Composition
 * Music and lyrics
 * See above note on deluxe edition and track count
 * "Stephen Thomas Erlewine of AllMusic opined that Title was a balance of old-fashioned girl group pop and old-school hip hop" is missing a citation
 * Add a comma after "According to Jim Farber of the New York Daily News"
 * No need to mention Amy Winehouse's nationality


 * Songs
 * "Trainor's vocal"..... vocals
 * Something about "It features a series of slick production slap-beats, a rock-inspired drum track, zippy piano and ebullient brass instrumentation" doesn't seem entirely encyclopedic
 * "tender love song" is POV
 * It doesn't seem neutral to call someone "shallow"
 * I fixed a quotation mark misplacement for the "Credit" song


 * Release
 * There's no reason to include a "premiere" of a track that was never released as a single or even a promotional single
 * Again, no need to include track count of original/deluxe editions here, or even the deluxe edition itself


 * Promotion
 * Is it necessary to include her cover of "Don't Stop"?
 * It would help to include when "That Bass Tour" will end


 * Singles
 * I'd mention that Trainor lost her Grammy nominations to Sam Smith (singer)
 * "Best-selling single" and 6 million copies are not explicitly stated in FN97 (World Music Awards). However, IFPI states it sold 11 million copies in 2014, and that it was among the best selling of 2014, so it's probably best to say it was a best-seller simply for that year instead of only calling it "a best-selling single".
 * FN16 (Billboard) actually says "Dear Future Husband" has peaked at #20, not #24


 * Critical reception
 * Only 10 reviews maximum should be included in review box
 * Per WP:OVERCITE, you don't need to include citations more than once in a row per paragraph
 * The URL for FN34 (AllMusic) is a review for Title (EP), not this album
 * The sentence with the "for better or for worse, more of the same" quote ends abruptly; include that The Boston Globe is saying it is "more of the same" of "All About That Bass"
 * "complimented Trainor's talent" is POV


 * Commerial performance
 * Again, remove any instances calling this simply a "debut"; they're misleading
 * How many copies has the album sold worldwide?
 * More certifications should be added here within prose


 * References
 * Lyric sites like "DirectLyrics" are not considered reliable
 * Not sure if "The Daily Beast" is a good source to use
 * "Daily News" should read "New York Daily News"
 * Associated Press shouldn't be italicized
 * Publisher for The New York Times is Arthur Ochs Sulzberger, Jr.
 * Is "Stoke Sentinel" reliable?
 * Publisher for The Seattle Times is Frank A. Blethen
 * "Boston Magazine" should simply read "Boston"
 * CBS News owner is CBS Corporation
 * Buzzfeed and "Daily Express" aren't exactly reliable
 * Publisher for The Boston Globe is John W. Henry
 * "Condé Nast Publications" should simply read Condé Nast
 * Us Weekly and Sugarscape are not at all reliable
 * What makes "andpop.com" (erroneously labeled as "Channel Zero") or "Mashable" reliable sources?
 * "Australiancharts.com" should read "Australian Charts" or ARIA Charts
 * "Charts.org.nz" should read "New Zealand Charts" or Official New Zealand Music Chart
 * "Danishcharts.com" should read "Danish Charts" or Tracklisten
 * "Norwegiancharts.com" should read "Norwegian Charts" or VG-lista
 * "Spanishcharts.com" should read "Spanish Charts" or Productores de Música de España
 * "Swedishcharts.com" should read "Swedish Charts" or Sverigetopplistan
 * "Swisscharts.com" should read "Swiss Charts" or Swiss Hitparade
 * iTunes shouldn't be italicized
 * "Austraincharts.at" should read "Austrian Charts" or Ö3 Austria Top 40
 * "Ultratop.be" should be "Dutch Charts" (or Dutch Top 40) for Dutch link, "French Charts" (or Syndicat National de l'Édition Phonographique) for French link
 * "Dutchcharts.nl" should read "Dutch Charts or Dutch Top 40
 * "Musicline.de. Phononet GmbH." should just read GfK Entertainment
 * "Lescharts.com" should read "French Charts" or Syndicat National de l'Édition Phonographique
 * "Italiancharts" should read "Italian Charts" or Federazione Industria Musicale Italiana
 * Twitter is discouraged for contentious material, so I don't recommend it for charts
 * "Portuguesecharts.com" should read "Portuguese Charts" or Associação Fonográfica Portuguesa
 * There should be no bare URL's


 * Overall
 * Well-written?
 * Prose quality: Lots of work is needed
 * Manual of Style: Some issues with lead and italics


 * Verifiable?
 * Reference layout: Problematic formatting and labelling
 * Reliable sources: Some sources need replacing
 * No original research: Not everything is supported by given references


 * Broad in coverage?
 * Major aspects: Missing bits
 * Focused: Close, but not quite


 * Neutral?: Almost


 * Stable?: Seems OK


 * Illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * Appropriate licensing: No copyright violations
 * Relevance and captioning: For the audio samples, no need to include what number tracks they are


 * Pass or Fail?: I am failing this without putting it on hold as there are too many problems right now (mainly with prose) to be a potential GA. DO NOT RENOMINATE RIGHT AWAY. Please ensure all statements are supported by attributed references, and it would probably help taking this to the WP:Guild of Copy Editors before renominating. Better luck next time. Snuggums (talk / edits) 20:32, 3 May 2015 (UTC)