Talk:To Ramona/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:53, 21 November 2022 (UTC)

I will crack on with this now! --K. Peake 08:53, 21 November 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Change Columbia Recording Studios to Columbia Recording under the studios parameter in the infobox
 * Pipe Tom Wilson to Tom Wilson (record producer)
 * "which was released on his fourth studio album" → "first released on his fourth studio album,"
 * Add a sentence with notable info about writing from the first section
 * Move the recording sentence to being the one before lyrical content
 * Mention next to the critics suggested part that the narrator advises Ramona not to follow others' advice
 * Pipe Sara Lownds to Sara Dylan
 * "for Another Side of Bob Dylan," → "for the album,"
 * Remove the album release in August since that is not notable
 * "have ranked the song as" → "have ranked it as"
 * Pipe B-side to A-side and B-side
 * "Belgium and Luxembourg in 1967, and has been" → "Belgium, and Luxembourg in 1967, and has since been"
 * Mention what the several live versions include
 * All done. I mentioned two of the several live versions in the lead. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 19:29, 21 November 2022 (UTC)

Background and recording

 * "The "To Ramona" lyrics were" → "The lyrics of "To Ramona" were"
 * Wikilink as the May Fair Hotel instead
 * Add a comma after "All I Really Want to Do"
 * "On June 9 at" → "On June 9, 1964, at" per this being a new para
 * Remove the comma before Another Side of Bob Dylan
 * Pipe Tom Wilson to Tom Wilson (record producer), while mentioning that he was the producer of all the tracks
 * "as the sixth track, the last" → "as the sixth track and the last"
 * Remove the release year of "The Last Letter" from brackets when it is already mentioned in prose
 * All Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 18:45, 21 November 2022 (UTC)

Lyrical interpretation

 * Maybe add relevant text to the img of Suze Rotolo?
 * "The song ends with" → "It ends with"
 * [8] should solely be invoked at the end of the sentence
 * "argue that the song may indeed refer to Baez," → "argue that Dylan may indeed refer to her,"
 * "Oliver Trager and" → "Oliver Trager, and"
 * Pipe Sara Lownds to Sara Dylan
 * "John Nogowski saw it" → "John Nogowski sees it"
 * "Jim Beviglia wrote that the track" → "Jim Beviglia writes that the track"
 * "as the narrator expresses" → "as they express"
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 19:12, 21 November 2022 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * Retitle to Reception per the rankings
 * "Heylin described the track as" → "Heylin describes the track as"
 * "words or advice."" → "words or advice"." per MOS:QWQ
 * "Trager praised the" → "Trager praises the"
 * Amended per the four points above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 18:59, 21 November 2022 (UTC)


 * "but added that "Dylan fumbles" → "but added how "Dylan fumbles"
 * Reworked per WP:QUOTEFARM comment below. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 18:59, 21 November 2022 (UTC)


 * "and described it as" → "and describes it as"
 * "has ever written."" → "has ever written"."
 * Wikilink Rolling Stone
 * "remarked of "To Ramona" and" → "remarks of "To Ramona" and"
 * Amended per the four points above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 18:59, 21 November 2022 (UTC)


 * Cut down the amount of direct quoting for the above per WP:QUOTEFARM
 * I made some amendments. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 18:59, 21 November 2022 (UTC)

Live performances and later releases

 * Make the releases para the last of this section instead
 * Pipe B-side to A-side and B-side
 * "Belgium and Luxembourg" → "Belgium, and Luxembourg"
 * Wikilink compilation album
 * "Dylan's older songs "re-envisioned almost to the point of non-recognition."" → "his older songs "re-envisioned almost to the point of non-recognition"." per MOS:QWQ
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:09, 21 November 2022 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

 * Pipe Tom Wilson to Tom Wilson (record producer)
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:02, 21 November 2022 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; nice job on this one! --K. Peake 11:14, 21 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Many thank, . Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 19:31, 21 November 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, did some brief copy editing but nice job here! --K. Peake 09:17, 22 November 2022 (UTC)