Talk:Tobruk (video game)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 15:35, 4 January 2016 (UTC)


 * Lede
 * I would add 1941 before Siege of Tobruk and in Gameplay section.
 * Added in lead and gameplay JAG  UAR   16:02, 4 January 2016 (UTC)


 * Gameplay
 * Mmm in reading 1st paragraph of Gameplay I feel like I'm reading the lede again, can you reword the lede or Gameplay to make it sound more different?
 * I agree, I've tried to reword both slightly JAG  UAR   16:02, 4 January 2016 (UTC)


 * Background
 * "in what Cockayne admitted in a retrospective interview that "he took his eye off the ball"." -wording doesn't quite fit. Try "Following years of successful sales throughout the mid 1980s, Personal Software Services experienced financial difficulties, during a period where Cockayne later admitted that he "took his eye off the ball".
 * Rephrased to this, thanks! JAG  UAR   16:02, 4 January 2016 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:

Good job!♦ Dr. Blofeld  16:15, 4 January 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! JAG  UAR   16:17, 4 January 2016 (UTC)