Talk:Tolkien's modern sources/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TompaDompa (talk · contribs) 10:18, 6 June 2023 (UTC)

I will review this. TompaDompa (talk) 10:18, 6 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 10:24, 6 June 2023 (UTC)

General comments

 * There are a fair number of images, including a WP:GALLERY. Less might be more, since the need for a gallery often indicates an unnecessarily high image-to-text ratio.
 * The only gallery is highly specific, illustrating four rather visual sources of inspiration, images from the adventure stories that Tolkien read.

Lead

 * I would link J. R. R. Tolkien in the WP:LEAD.
 * Done.


 * I would give the years the works mentioned in the lead are from.
 * Added.


 * I would mention that the Morlocks are from The Time Machine.
 * Done.


 * Further, Tolkien's account of Bilbo Baggins and his party setting off into the wild on ponies resembles Morris's account of his travels in Iceland in several details. – this should probably be attributed.
 * Done.


 * Tolkien's mature writings have been described [...] – ditto.
 * Done..


 * Tolkien's mature writings – clarify whether this means "mature" as in later in his literary career or as in intended for an older audience.
 * Reworded.


 * "Sneered at" is a bit overly informal.
 * Reworded.

Context

 * "bestselling" is not needed in this context and comes off as borderline promotional.
 * Removed, though it's easily cited.


 * Dale Nelson surveys 24 authors – that's "surveys" as in "examines [the works of]" rather than "sends a poll to", right? I would replace it with "lists", "discusses", or something along those lines to avoid the ambiguity.
 * Done.


 * Nelson says "twenty-four British authors and one American author", so that should be 25 authors total.
 * Fixed.

English literary traditions

 * Postwar literary figures such as Anthony Burgess, Edwin Muir and Philip Toynbee dismissed Tolkien as non-modernist, and sneered at The Lord of the Rings – the source doesn't really say that they dismissed Tolkien as non-modernist, and "sneered at" is an overly informal phrasing.
 * Reworded.

Summary
Ping. TompaDompa (talk) 08:35, 8 June 2023 (UTC)

Ping. I believe I've addressed everything now. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Indeed. Well done! TompaDompa (talk) 21:59, 8 June 2023 (UTC)