Talk:Tom Liberatore/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The C of E (talk · contribs) 12:03, 21 January 2022 (UTC)

I will take on the review of this. Should be done in a few days  The C of E God Save the Queen!  ( talk ) 12:03, 21 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Where was he born? That should be in the lead
 * ✅ - Incorporated into existing sentence. Doggo375 (talk) 22:48, 21 January 2022 (UTC)


 * As per MOS:CONVERSIONS, Should really be using the template rather than spelling out weight amounts (and should be the shorthand unit codes for consistency and metric should be using metres)
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:48, 21 January 2022 (UTC)


 * "Liberatore was born in Melbourne, Victoria to father Tony Liberatore, former Western Bulldogs player and Brownlow Medallist, and mother Jane." Can we reword that so it flows better please?
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 07:12, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * "Although he put time into cricket, playing seriously with his school and St.Bernard's Cricket Club." MOS:OP-ED violation. It also appears to be a run-on sentence.
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 09:53, 31 January 2022 (UTC)


 * "Liberatore made his debut in the Western Bulldogs' Round one defeat to Essendon" MOS:CAPS
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 03:38, 28 January 2022 (UTC)


 * "impressive debut season" WP:WEASEL
 * ✅ - Provided a reference using that wording. Doggo375 (talk) 07:45, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * "The 2012 season was not a good one for Liberatore," OP-ED
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 07:10, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * What sort of drug offences was he sanctioned for?
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 07:10, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * "In the early hours of 5 August 2012," MOS:RELTIME
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 03:25, 28 January 2022 (UTC)


 * "Liberatore redeemed himself the following season, establishing himself as one of the AFL's premier inside midfielders" MOS:PUFFERY
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 09:34, 31 January 2022 (UTC)


 * 22under22 is a redirect
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:48, 21 January 2022 (UTC)


 * "While 2014 was a chaotic year", OP-ED again
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 03:25, 28 January 2022 (UTC)


 * "had a horror 2015", OP-ED
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 03:38, 28 January 2022 (UTC)


 * 2020—present: Return to form section, OP-ED again
 * Do you mean the name of the section or the content of the section itself? Doggo375 (talk) 07:52, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * The Honours section is unreferenced
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 07:33, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Reference 18, 37, 39, ABC is not a print media outlet so shouldn't be italicised
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:48, 21 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Reference 31, no publisher
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:27, 21 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Reference 34, italicise Herald Sun for consistency
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:28, 21 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Reference 106, consistency needed with the likes of reference 104
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:48, 26 January 2022 (UTC)


 * There are 2 non-free images of him here, is that necessary?


 * In all, there are some serious WP:TONE issues here, the language really needs to be a lot more formal. I will give you a week to sort this and put this on hold but it may need a complete rewrite.  The C of E God Save the Queen!  ( talk ) 18:32, 21 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi, would it be possible for me to get some extra time to work on this review? I've been quite busy irl and I just need a touch more time to get this all cleared up. Cheers! Doggo375 (talk) 23:46, 26 January 2022 (UTC)
 * How long do you need do you reckon?  The C of E God Save the Queen!  ( talk ) 15:30, 27 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Just a few days should be fine, thanks! :) Doggo375 (talk) 03:37, 28 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Having not been pinged for a month, and the fact there are still OP-ED issues on the return to form section. I am afraid I have to decline this one.  The C of E God Save the Queen!  ( talk ) 07:34, 3 March 2022 (UTC)

Status query
The C of E, Doggo375, what is the status of this nomination? The most recent edits to the article and to this page are over a month old, and I can't tell whether everything has been addressed above. I hope the review can get moving again. Thank you very much. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:35, 2 March 2022 (UTC)