Talk:Tom Linebarger

Some Proposed Changes
Specific text to be added or removed:


 * 1) Under Education section, add clarification that both master's degrees were earned at Stanford University. It could be added like "He has an MSc in manufacturing systems from the School of Engineering at Stanford University and an MBA from the Graduate School of Business at Stanford University."
 * 2) Under Career section, add correction that he began his career as an investment analyst (not investment manager) at Prudential Financial. He became an investment manager for the company in Hong Kong and Singapore. It could be corrected     as "Linebarger began his career as an investment analyst for Prudential Finanancial and became an investment manager for the company in Hong Kong and Singapore."
 * 3) Under Career section, add updated/missing information that Linebarger retired from Cummins in 2022. It could be added as "Linebarger retired from Cummins in 2022."
 * 4) Under Career section, add updated/missing information that Linebarger has worked on fighting climate change and include examples of this work. It could be added as "Linebarger works on fighting climate change. As CEO of Cummins, he built a strategy to move to green power solutions. The strategy used the cash flow of the current business to fund the     development and acquisition of new zero-carbon industrial and transportation solutions while working to maintain a leadership position for Cummins during the transition."
 * 5) Under Career section, add updated/missing information that Linebarger has shared his experience on green power solutions publicly, including meeting with White House officials, Members of Congress, including official testimony. It could be added as "Linebarger has spoken publicly about fighting climate change and green power solutions in the industrial and     transportation sector. He has met with White House officials, and Members of Congress, including official testimony on these and related topics."
 * 6) Under Career section, add updated/missing information that Linebarger has written statements and op-eds on the topics of social justice and racial equity. It could be added as "Linebarger has written statements and opinion-editorials (op-eds) on social justice and racial equity. Published opinion pieces have focused on immigration reform and dismantling system     racisim.
 * 7) Under Career section, add updated/missing information that Linebgarger has worked on female advancement during his career. It could be added as "Linebarger promoted the first woman CEO in Cummins' history. He also led a $23-million commitment by Cummins to support the advancement and prosperity of women and girls around the world."
 * 8) Under Boards section, add updated/missing information that Linebarger has been a member of numerous public and private boards in addition to Harley Davidson. It could be added as "Linebarger was a member of the Business Roundtable from 2012 to 2022, the Central Indiana Corporate Partnership from 2009 to 2023, serving as chair from 2021 to 2023. He was a member of the Hydrogen Council from 2018 to 2023, serving as chair from 2021 to 2023. Linebarger was a member of the U.S.-China Business Council from 2016 to 2022, serving as chair from 2020 to 2022."
 * 9) Under Personal Life section, add updated/missing information to include more details about Linebargers's early life. It could be added as "Linebarger was born in Los Altos, California in 1963. He was raised, along with his younger brother, by a single mother. The family relied on state assistance. His mother worked during the day and went to school at night, eventually becoming an occupational therapist."

Reason for the change:


 * 1) Clarification that both master's degrees were earned at Stanford University.
 * 2) Correction that he began his career as an investment analyst (not investment manager) at Prudential Financial. He later became an investment manager for the company in Hong Kong and Singapore.
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References supporting change:


 * 1) https://americanenergyinnovation.org/tom-linebarger/
 * 2) https://edgementoring.org/tom-linebarger/ https://www.businessroundtable.org/archive/about/members/tom-linebarger
 * 3) https://www.ibj.com/articles/cummins-ceo-tom-linebarger-to-step-down-aug-1
 * 4) https://www.forbes.com/sites/alanohnsman/2022/02/23/how-diesel-giant-cummins-might-beat-tesla-in-the-green-engine-battle/?sh=4afa9bb043c8
 * 5) https://www.whitehouse.gov/briefing-room/speeches-remarks/2022/01/26/remarks-by-president-biden-at-build-back-better-ceo-roundtable/#:~:text=THE%20PRESIDENT%3A%20Let%20me%20begin,has%20shown%20some%20real%20results. https://www.govinfo.gov/content/pkg/CHRG-115hhrg33481/pdf/CHRG-115hhrg33481.pdf https://www.indystar.com/story/news/politics/2017/07/18/cummins-ceo-congress-update-but-dont-end-nafta/489359001/ https://www.govinfo.gov/content/pkg/CHRG-109hhrg29812/pdf/CHRG-109hhrg29812.pdf
 * 6) https://www.indystar.com/story/opinion/2021/02/01/cummins-ceo-tom-linebarger-congress-daca-federal-law/4306924001/ https://www.indystar.com/story/opinion/2020/06/05/op-ed-2-indiana-ceos-pledge-action-help-end-systemic-racism-u-s/3137100001/
 * 7) https://www.trucknews.com/business-management/cummins-leader-steps-aside-promotes-first-female-ceo-as-his-replacement/1003167386/ https://www.indystar.com/story/money/business/2022/07/14/jennifer-rumsey-cummins-indiana-engine-producer-first-woman-ceo-business/65373356007/ https://cxotoday.com/press-release/cummins-powers-women-supports-global-non-profit-rise-ups-program-to-strengthen-gender-equity-in-india/#:~:text=1%3A04%20pm-,Cummins%20Powers%20Women'%20Supports%20Global%20Non%2Dprofit%20Rise%20Up's%20Program,Strengthen%20Gender%20Equity%20in%20India&text=22%20local%20non%2Dprofit%20leaders,%2C%20and%20gender%2Dnonconforming%20people. https://www.cummins.com/company/esg/social/corporate-responsibility/cummins-powers-women
 * 8) https://www.businessroundtable.org/archive/about/members/tom-linebarger https://www.cicpindiana.com/cicp-elects-new-executive-committee-members/ https://hydrogencouncil.com/en/newmembers-newcochair-july2021/ https://www.uschina.org/media/press/us-china-business-council-elects-new-board-members-consequential-time-bilateral-relationship
 * 9) https://open.spotify.com/episode/68teQfIFaj0LfOyTRNIhD1?go=1&sp_cid=2d488ba67bddbf0ede60ee80c07545af&utm_source=embed_player_p&utm_medium=desktop&nd=1 https://www.forbes.com/sites/alanohnsman/2022/02/23/how-diesel-giant-cummins-might-beat-tesla-in-the-green-engine-battle/?sh=4afa9bb043c8

FebKate (talk) 16:22, 19 December 2023 (UTC)

Reply 20-DEC-2023
Your edit request could not be reviewed because the request is not formatted correctly. In the collapsed section below titled Request edit examples, I have illustrated two: The first shows how the edit request was submitted; the second shows how requests should be submitted in the future.
 * 1) The citation style predominantly used by the Tom Linebarger article appears to be Citation Style 1. The citation style used in the edit request consists of bare URL's. Any requested edit of yours which may be implemented will need to resemble the current style already in use in the article – in this case, CS1. (See WP:CITEVAR.)
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INCORRECT The Sun's diameter is 864,337.3 miles, while the Moon's diameter is 2,159 miles. The Sun's temperature is 5,778 Kelvin.

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CORRECT The Sun's diameter is 864,337.3 miles, while the Moon's diameter is 2,159 miles. The Sun's temperature is 5,778 Kelvin. Which displays as: The Sun's diameter is 864,337.3 miles,[1] while the Moon's diameter is 2,159 miles.[2] The Sun's temperature is 5,778 Kelvin.[3]

References

^ Sjöblad, Tristan. . Academic Press, 2020, p. 1. ^ Harinath, Prisha. , Science, 51(78):46. 2020. ^ Uemura, Shū. . Academic Press, 2020, p. 2. 

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Regards, Spintendo  08:27, 20 December 2023 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your guidance. I will write a new edit request according to your direction. FebKate (talk) 20:46, 21 January 2024 (UTC)

Some Proposed Edits
1. Under Education section, update second sentence to: He has an MSc in manufacturing systems from the School of Engineering at Stanford University and an MBA from the Graduate School of Business at Stanford University.
 * What I think should be changed (include citations):

2. Under Career section, update first sentence to: Linebarger began his career as an investment analyst for Prudential Financial and became an investment manager for the company in Hong Kong and Singapore.

3. Under Career section, add final sentence: Linebarger retired from Cummins in 2022.

4. Under Career section, add third paragraph: Linebarger works on fighting climate change. As CEO of Cummins, he built a strategy to move to green power solutions. The strategy used the cash flow of the current business to fund the development and acquisition of new zero-carbon industrial and transportation solutions while working to maintain a leadership position for Cummins during the transition. Linebarger has spoken publicly about fighting climate change and green power solutions in the industrial and transportation sector. He has met with White House officials, and Members of Congress, including official testimony on these and related topics.

5. Under Career section, add fourth section: Linebarger has written statements and opinion-editorials (op-eds) on social justice and racial equity. Published opinion pieces have focused on immigration reform and dismantling system racism.

6. Under Career section, add fifth section: Linebarger promoted the first woman CEO in Cummins' history. He also led a $23-million commitment by Cummins to support the advancement and prosperity of women and girls around the world.

7. Under Boards section, add to existing section: Linebarger was a member of the Business Roundtable from 2012 to 2022, the Central Indiana Corporate Partnership from 2009 to 2023, serving as chair from 2021 to 2023. He was a member of the Hydrogen Council from 2018 to 2023, serving as chair from 2021 to 2023. Linebarger was a member of the U.S.-China Business Council from 2016 to 2022, serving as chair from 2020 to 2022.

8. Under Personal Life section, update to: Linebarger was born in Los Altos, California in 1963. He was raised, along with his younger brother, by a single mother. The family relied on state assistance. His mother worked during the day and went to school at night, eventually becoming an occupational therapist.

1. Clarification that both master's degrees were earned at Stanford University.
 * Why it should be changed:

2. Correction that he began his career as an investment analyst (not investment manager) at Prudential Financial. He later became an investment manager for the company in Hong Kong and Singapore.

3. Missing information.

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FebKate (talk) 00:49, 22 January 2024 (UTC)


 * Hello, thank you for submitting this edit request. I have decided to decline your request at present as many of the statements you wish to be added appear to be aimed at promoting the subject. We may be able to add more information about Linebarger's education if a source that is independent of any company Linebarger has connections with can be found, but we will not be able to add the information about Linebarger's actions at the companies he works for or his social justice initiatives. I hope you understand this. Thank you, Redtree21 (talk) 08:55, 25 February 2024 (UTC)