Talk:Tom Palazzolo

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 29 January 2020 and 5 May 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Lecyborg87, Watiekilliams. Peer reviewers: Hds415, Jieunny.

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Review by Jillian
I think you include a bit too much in paragraph in your leader. Try to simplify it and break it up.

Watch some general punctuation errors (i.e. "at the Museum of Modern Art IN New York, the Whitney Museum of American Art..."

Titles of films in the your article should be italicized. Otherwise, good research. Sickcakez (talk) 17:37, 3 March 2018 (UTC)

Review
This is a good overview. Consider finding a few other sources for biographical information and so that you are not relying to heavily on the Reader article. Also, find a way to format your writing so it fits the encyclopedic style of most Wikipedia articles (cut or reword words like "hustle" or "found himself exploring" -- depersonalize everything). Finally, consider sections that follow his artistic development or major works, rather than "School" and "Post-School." AmyDeer (talk) 22:40, 6 March 2018 (UTC)

Review by Ashley
Overall, great job! You found a lot of material and did a good job organizing it. Watch for a few grammar and punctuation errors -- for example: - insert a comma right after "Jerry's (1976)" in the first paragraph. - under the "early life" section, remove the capital "S" from the word school on the last line — Preceding unsigned comment added by A gilla (talk • contribs) 01:27, 7 March 2018 (UTC)

Review by Laura
You summarize Palazzolo's life and works very clearly. A few points you might consider to add have to do with Palazzolo's relationship with SAIC and Kenneth Josephson. When Palazzolo started at SAIC, many students were following the style of abstract expressionism. Palazzolo rebelled against this and admired fine artists in the social realist style such as Gustave Courbet, Edgar Degas, and Eduard Manet. Jack Helbig's article sites that Palazzolo took Josephson's photography class in 1963 and that Josephson let him use his own Keystone 16-millimeter camera. Due to this generous offer, Palazzolo created his first films. Josephson also introduced him to experimental and underground films like Dreamland by Lindsay Anderson. Pigeon Lady in 1966 and O were two of his most successful early films that really defined the rest of his style in urban portraits and observation-based films. It's important to emphasize his prolific practice since he has made so many films independently and through various collaborations throughout his life. Also, could you add a listing of his exhibitions and awards?

review by Jieun
Overall, the summary of Palazzolo's life is very clear. There are good amount of sources and citations. There are enough information for his professional life part. But, his personal life part and early life part seem to need more information. Especially, I would like to see more of his works and if there is any awards he granted, I would like to see it,too. Also, I want to know about how he develops his films and what is his own style when he makes film. Also, you mentioned that he was collaborating with some people. I want to hear more about it, because it is interesting. Please tell us more about his own work, and collaborating works. Otherwise, the article is very useful and well-organized.

review by Sophie
Does the article have enough sources and citations (Wikipedia suggests an average of one citation per sentence)? -I think the article could benefit from a few more sources/citations, if available. It's a pretty long article with only 7 sources. Maybe some of the individual films/projects have external reputable sites that could be referenced?

Does the article have any glaring content gaps? Does it seem complete or does it need more information? -I think the filmography section should be made consistent, i.e. "length" added for each film if it's going to be noted for a few. should additional information go here, e.g., brief descriptions of the films? was palazollo Director of each of these or did he work in another position for any? -has he received any awards/recognitions/honorary degrees that could be mentioned? additional film festivals or notable showings? -it's interesting that he worked for the US Information Agency - is there any more that could be said about this? -otherwise, the content seems pretty complete

Is the article well organized? -I think so. if there are a number of recognitions/awards that end up being added, possibly this could create a new section

Is the lead section a concise overview of the article's subject? (For example, from Wikipedia "The lead should stand on its own as a concise overview of the article's topic. It should identify the topic, establish context, explain why the topic is notable, and summarize the most important points. The notability of the article's subject is usually established in the first few sentences.") -The lead section does a good job of briefly describing Palazollo's professional life but it could be good to bring in a bit about his education and/or teaching practice, since these are significant portions of the main article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Scjenk (talk • contribs) 16:32, 5 March 2019 (UTC)

review by Christie
Overall, You did a great job summarizes his professional life. I think it was also great to see some photos of palazzo's work from the Chicago film archive and Flaxman library. However, the description you wrote below the photo of Palazzolo's painting, people might not understand where the Flaxman library in the sharp building is. I think it will be better to include the School of the Art Institute somewhere in the description for more clarification. Also, when you introducing major works of Tom Palazzolo think about the way you can clearly identify the topic and establish context. I think I am lacking an explanation of why the topic or the piece is notable. Maybe including more information about winning awards (if there is any) might be helpful too. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 142.147.59.129 (talk) 17:43, 10 March 2020 (UTC)