Talk:Tom Reece/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:47, 23 October 2020 (UTC)

Am reviewing this for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 19:47, 23 October 2020 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Infobox

 * Add where Oldham is in England for those who do not know
 * 6-times should be "Six-times"
 * Don't think runner-up needs to begin with a capital letter when it is not the first word in a sentence
 * Done. Although Oldham is now in Greater Manchester, it looks like it was in Lancashire in 1873. I've wiki-linked Oldham and Lancing as these are perhaps not well-known places internationally. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:49, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Lead

 * "and three times to Tom Newman in finals in 1921, 1924 and 1925." - in the 1921, 1924 and 1925 finals.
 * "His highest officially-recognised break was 901." - add the year in which this break was compiled
 * Both done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:54, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Early life

 * "Reece was born in Oldham on 12 August 1873}" - the closed curly bracket should be replaced by a comma
 * "and worked in a cotton mill. He used to visit a gymnasium to train for swimming and at the age of 16 started playing billiards on the gymnasium's table." - think all this text needs to be cited to a reliable source
 * Both done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:08, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Early billiards career and record break

 * "In a cradle cannon sequence, the two object balls are played into a position" - the "s" in "object ball" should also be part of the wikilink
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:16, 24 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Chapman didn't get to play any shots during this time." - the word in bold should be written as did not to avoid violating MOS:CONTRACTION
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:16, 24 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "the responsibility to determine whether a player was in breach was passed to match referees." - breach of what exactly?
 * Amended. In the absence of an agreed written description, the responsibility was thrown over to referees to judge whether a player was playing cradle cannons in breach of the rules - seems highly unsatisfactory. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:16, 24 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "The world record break under the current rules, as of July 2020," - think the text in bold can be deleted since it might become a dated statement
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:16, 24 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "who has been declared the Control Club champion in February 1909." - had
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:16, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Later professional career

 * "He recounted that here had been a tradition that the company that manufactured the billiard table that a record break was made on would pay £100 to the player making the break." = on which a record break was complied on
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:46, 24 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Following the spread of the cradle cannon following Lovejoy's employment of the method in 1907," - don't think "spread" is the right word to use here
 * Amended - let me know if you have a better wording. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:46, 24 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "the record was frequently increasing, which meant more expense for the table manufacturers." - for table manufacturers.
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:46, 24 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "he was careful about not using too much chalk," - overusing
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:46, 24 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "He played one professional snooker match, at the 1946 World Snooker Championship, retiring from the match when 2–8 behind to Kingsley Kennerley." - repetition of "match"
 * Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:46, 24 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Reese claimed in the latter book to have sometimes played billiards with Guglielmo Marconi, before 'Marconi became well known." - repetition of "Marconi"
 * Amended - let me know if you have a better wording. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:46, 24 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Reece married Laura Lydia Williams on the morning of 6 June 1908," - who was subject highlighted in bold?
 * Williams is mentioned in 14 sources from June 1908 available in the British Newspaper Archive about the wedding, but is only described as either "the daughter of a retired Army officer" or "a gifted young London lady". BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:46, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Professional Championship Finals

 * Think you will need to reformat the final eight citations to read as not as  for consistency
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:22, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Billiards Association and Control Club Championship finals

 * "After the 1919 Championship," - change the text in bold to event to avoid the repetition later on
 * Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:57, 24 October 2020 (UTC)