Talk:Tomiris (film)/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 23:54, 24 August 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:54, 24 August 2021 (UTC)
 * In the infobox, replace  with a "plainlist" or an "unbulleted list".
 * Non-free use rationale for the poster looks good.
 * "Khazakhstan" – typo?
 * Similar to MOS:INFOBOXREF, citations in the lead should be moved to the body of the article.
 * I would suggest merging #Queen_Tomyris and #Cyrus_the_Great into a single section titled #Background.
 * If someone has already been linked before, remove their links in #Plot.
 * "at her early age" – reword
 * "Some time" should be written as one word.
 * Add "the" before "Persian capital".
 * Avoid using a lot of commas in short sentences.
 * "Almira Tursyn, a psychologist, was chosen from 15 thousand people to play the role of Tomyris. She took professional lessons of horseriding and archery. She also learned to use swords and knives." – I would suggest moving this sentence to #Production since it feels weird to have it be the only sentence in #Cast.
 * I still think #Production is too short for a GA article. Try expanding it.
 * "The budget of the film" "The budget for the film" or "The film's budget"
 * Since they are short, #Release and #Critical_response can be merged.
 * Add "the" before "Middle East".
 * "Distribution in the United States and Canada was picked up by Amazon Prime Video." – move this to the first paragraph of #Release
 * Resolve the "citation needed" tag.
 * #Historical_authenticity could fit within #Production.
 * Add "an" before "artificially".
 * Add "the" before "vicinity".
 * "The clothes worn by the Massagetae in the film is" "The clothes worn by the Massagetae in the film are"
 * "of different style" "of different styles" or "of a different style"
 * Are the external links to Instagram and Twitter necessary?
 * Thank you very much for your delightful work and specific suggestions. All of them have now been thoroughly implemented, and I'm looking forward for your further remarks. Thank you once again and take care! -- Visioncurve Timendi causa est nescire  02:38, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the update. The article appears to contain several one-sentence paragraphs. Try merging them per MOS:BODY. Also, #Plot has links of people already linked in #Background so I would remove those links. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 02:44, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your latest remarks. They are all done as well. Thanks and take care!-- Visioncurve Timendi causa est nescire  16:03, 2 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I am not satisfied with the state of the article. Reviews need to be more detailed. The obviously political purposes of the state-sponsored movie generated much news - cover those bits. TrangaBellam (talk) 11:43, 13 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Progress