Talk:Tommy James (American football)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 18:11, 19 July 2013 (UTC)

Just want to say thanks for picking this up and that I'm here and ready to address any issues and answer any queries. --Batard0 (talk) 18:30, 19 July 2013 (UTC)

Comments The Rambling Man (talk) 17:17, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
 * "1950s. James was born" -> "1950s. He was born"
 * Done. --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
 * " he starred as a back" not sure on the neutrality of saying "starred".
 * Changed to "played." --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
 * "he followed Brown to Ohio State, where he played as" second "he", strictly speaking it's unclear whether it's James or Brown you're referring to here.
 * Rephrased to eliminate the second use of "he." --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
 * "He went to grammar" He attended?
 * Fixed.--Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Consider linking grammar school.
 * Linked.--Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Consider linking touchdown. I know it's obvious to you but it's not obvious to all international readers.
 * Linked.--Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
 * I would expect win-loss to use an en-dash, just like the record itself does!
 * Done.--Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
 * "James had an interception" do you mean he "made" one or "suffered" one?
 * Made one. Changed. --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
 * "as he got older" not keen on this phrase, perhaps "as an older player" or something?
 * Put in "later in his career". --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
 * What does "on waivers" mean?
 * It means you allow other teams to employ him on the same contractual terms as you signed him on. If a player "clears waivers" it means no team wanted to pick up the contract, and at that point he's free to make a new contract with any team. I linked it and briefly described it. --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Ref 17 title could use an en-dash.
 * Fixed. --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)

GA criteria

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

A few minor prose issues, otherwise no problems here, I'll place it on hold for a week until I'm notified that the article has been updated. Cheers. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:17, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Just the comments above to be addressed regarding prose improvement.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * All issues above are addressed, I believe, but I'm happy to make any additional adjustments. Thanks, and this certainly makes the article better. --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)