Talk:Tonga at the 2000 Summer Olympics/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

I will review this article shortly. « Gonzo fan2007  (talk)  @ 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * "The Tongan delegation to these Olympics consisted of three competitors, two track and field athletes; Toluta'u Koula and Ana Siulolo Liku; and weightlifter Tevita Kofe Ngalu." - Recommend removing "to these Olympics" as this is implied and "three competitors" since the reader can easily surmise the total. Makes the sense more concise. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)


 * Background
 * "The Kingdom made its Olympic debut at the 1984 Summer Olympics, and has appeared at every Summer Olympic Games since then, making these Sydney Games their fifth appearance." - nowhere prior have you referred to Tonga as a "Kingdom". This should be referenced earlier int he article of expanded to *"Kingdom of Tonga" in this instance.
 * "The Tongan delegation to these Olympics consisted of three competitors, two track and field athletes; Toluta'u Koula and Ana Siulolo Liku; and weightlifter Tevita Kofe Ngalu." - Same comment from the lead. I also am not a big fan of exact duplicates on sentences in an article. Maybe rewrite into two sentences? « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)


 * Athletics
 * "Toluta'u Koula was 30 years old at the time of the Sydney Olympics, and was making..." - recommend splitting into two sentences after "Sydney Olympics"
 * "The gold medal was eventually won in 9.87 seconds by Maurice Greene of the United States; the silver was won by Ato Boldon of Trinidad and Tobago, and the bronze was earned by Obadele Thompson of Barbados" - either use a semi-colon after Tobago, or remove the comma after Tobago altogether. I recommend the first option.
 * "1996 Atlanta Olympics" link to 1996 Summer Olympics
 * "On 25 September, she was drawn into heat three of the women's 100 meter hurdles, where she finished the race in a time of 14.58 seconds, eighth and last in her heat, and she was eliminated." - recommend splitting into two sentences after "seconds". Note that you also do not need the last "she" « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)


 * Weightlifting
 * "Tevita Kofe Ngalu was 27 years old at the time of the Sydney Olympics, and was making his only Olympic appearance." - no need for the comma after Olympics. Also, although unlikely, I assume he is still eligible to compete in the Olympics? Thus he made his only appearance to date or he made his first appearance?
 * Comma removed. He'll be 49 at the time of Tokyo, so, technically eligible, yes, but his chances of making another trip to the Games resemble those of a snowball in Tonga. Courcelles (talk) 21:55, 29 November 2018 (UTC)
 * "...for an athlete to rank for the event, and each weightlifter got three attempts in each discipline..." - no need for the comma
 * "...however four weightlifters failed to set any mark in the snatch, and they were not allowed to advance to the clean and jerk." - no need for the comma or the word "they"
 * "This placed him 13th and last, as another four lifters failed to set a mark in the clean and jerk and those lifters went unranked in the competition" - recommend rewording "as another" to "although". Also, "those lifters" can be removed. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)


 * Images
 * Only photo is the Tongan flag, which is PD. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 16:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)


 * References
 * Refs look good.
 * Slight concern that there is only two real sources for this information in total. Like to have at least 3-4. Are there any other sources (news articles, etc) that could be added?
 * Found some sources from ESPN, The Daily Telegraph, and the IAAF that back up what was already in the article and added them; failed to find anything new to add, though. Courcelles (talk) 22:08, 29 November 2018 (UTC)
 * Were you planning on archiving the sources? If so, please do so before the GA review is done so I can review the formatting of the refs. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 16:22, 29 November 2018 (UTC)


 * Comments
 * Looks good, no major issues. Will place on hold. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 16:22, 29 November 2018 (UTC)
 * Everything addressed, ; references archived as well. Courcelles (talk) 22:10, 29 November 2018 (UTC)
 * Nice work. Passed. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 16:34, 30 November 2018 (UTC)