Talk:Toni Musulin/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: KimChee (talk) 09:27, 6 December 2010 (UTC)

First impressions
I will review this article. Upon first look, no dead or disambiguation links. The existing prose appears acceptable, but the article is otherwise short and unprepared to pass GA review unless drastically improved. For example: Bonne chance d'améliorer l'article. KimChee (talk) 09:27, 6 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Insufficiently sourced: The lead contains an unsourced paragraph (this would be acceptable if the lead summarized information elsewhere in the article that was properly sourced). I found the French version of the quote "he is a responsible man ..." in citation [6]; please note that every quote must be immediately followed by the citation of the source (see WP:QUOTE). However, the quote "We will do everything so ..." is unsourced.
 * Broadness of coverage: No information about Musulin's background or his upbringing? The infobox mentions he was born in Serbia; when and how did he enter France? When did he acquire the Ferrari? The lead mentions discussion on a social networking site &mdash; which site(s) are these?
 * I also recommend checking for accuracy as the infobox had previously listed Serbia as his place of birth, though this source states that he was born in Saint-Martin-d'Hères. KimChee (talk) 10:27, 6 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Images: None to illustrate the topic?
 * Copyediting needed:
 * First and last paragraph in lead section are each only one sentence long.
 * Date formats can be either in American or British style, but should be consistently applied in the article and followed by a comma after the year, especially if used as a parenthetical in mid-sentence.
 * Number formats should use decimal periods (not commas) in English language articles
 * Usage of "euro" that is not at the beginning of a sentence should be lower case.
 * Names of publications, such as The Epoch Times should be italicized and spelled correctly. It is also not always necessary to include the names of publications in the prose if they are cited in the references. KimChee (talk) 22:54, 8 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Hello, thanks for the review and suggestions. I'll have a look at it and try to improve the article. Laurent (talk) 09:43, 6 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Hello, I haven't forgotten about the article. I will try to do the changes as soon as possible. Laurent (talk) 02:37, 10 December 2010 (UTC)