Talk:Tony DeAngelo/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 23:23, 22 June 2021 (UTC)

Reviewing later. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  23:23, 22 June 2021 (UTC)


 * "He was removed from the ice during the second period of the Sting's January 31 game against the Guelph Storm, and the OHL released a statement on February 14 that DeAngelo would be suspended for eight games following a violation of the league's Harassment and Abuse/Diversity Policy." The year should be added here, and could be removed for the last sentence of the paragraph.
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 16:23, 27 June 2021 (UTC)
 * "Despite these incidents," Not mentioned in text.
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 16:23, 27 June 2021 (UTC)
 * "director of amateur scouting" Is this a title that should be capitalized?
 * You would think, but the source used all lowercase!  Kncny11  (shoot) 16:23, 27 June 2021 (UTC)
 * Nothing for his personal life except his political views?
 * The deeper he falls into extremism, the harder it is to find anything outside of his political views (he also doesn't have a romantic partner or children, which is usually an easy go-to). I found one charity event he participated in in 2018.  Kncny11  (shoot) 16:23, 27 June 2021 (UTC)
 * "US president" should be expanded and linked.
 * ✅  Kncny11  (shoot) 16:23, 27 June 2021 (UTC)
 * Picked up a 97% using the copyvio tool, but that website seems to be scrapping content from Wikipedia.

That should be it. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  06:13, 27 June 2021 (UTC)