Talk:Too Much Too Soon (album)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 12:19, 25 October 2013 (UTC)

Hey Dan, I'll be glad to take this review. Comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:19, 25 October 2013 (UTC)

This looks quite good on first pass, and so far, essentially ready for promotion. One small action point:


 * "^ Christgau, p. 279" -- needs year to clarify which source this is from.
 * done. Dan56 (talk) 00:17, 26 October 2013 (UTC)

1a note: Some sentences are rather superficial rewrites of their sources, mirroring both specific language and structure more than I'm comfortable with. For example,
 * Article: The album's front cover shows the band in a mock live performance and avoids the drag style of their debut's cover. For shock value, Thunders held a doll in his arm as if to strike it against his guitar
 * Source: The front cover pic has the band in a mock live shot in far less of the drag style than their previous album. For full shock value, Thunders has a doll by the arm, as if he's about to use it to strike his guitar.

If there was a full paragraph like the above, it would probably be a fail for excessive close paraphrasing. But since no source seems to be used for anything longer than this example, and the material is at least superficially paraphrased, I don't think that it's extensive enough that it could be considered a copyright violation. The bottom line is that I'd recommend that some of this be revisited and rewritten, but it also appears to me within the GA criteria. -- Khazar2 (talk) 00:54, 26 October 2013 (UTC)