Talk:Tornado outbreak of June 19, 1951/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 21:09, 18 August 2022 (UTC)

Copy changes needed throughout. The last section is quite dense and needs to be broken up and better organized. 7-day hold to. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 21:28, 18 August 2022 (UTC)

Lead

 * Add comma after Minneapolis to give the reader a pause in this long sentence
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * $5.030 million (1951 USD) consider using formatprice and an inflation estimate from inflation.
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)

Synopsis

 * Decapitalize "northeastern" (but not Central as a recognized region)
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)

Confirmed tornadoes

 * Remove comma after "CDNS report"
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * "but it was not confirmed because it was not confirmed to have touched down" wordy, consider reword
 * Comma after "Comanche County, Kansas" (MOS:GEOCOMMA)
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * "12 miles (19 km)" this convert needs on set. The sentence needs help, too: The tornado was spotted right before a hail and high wind storm, which originated about 6 miles (9.7 km) north of Ashland, moved southward, causing a 12 miles (19 km) wide swath of damage as winds flattened nearly ripe wheat, and hail caused extensive damage to crops and light damage to property.
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Consider The tornado was spotted right before a hail and high wind storm which had originated about 6 miles (9.7 km) north of Ashland moved southward and caused a 12-mile (19 km) wide swath of damage. High winds flattened nearly ripe wheat, while hail caused extensive damage to crops and light damage to property.
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * over 3 inches (7.6 cm) that damaged Coldwater, Over three inches of what?
 * ✅ Whoops. Forgot a word. LOL! ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ Whoops. Forgot a word. LOL! ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)


 * This violent F4 tornado, which may have been a tornado family, was first observed touching down McLeod County, and immediately striking the south side of Hutchinson at around 5:30 pm CT. Add "in" after "down" and remove the comma after "County" (see User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences)
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Comma after "obliterated"; see the page linked above
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * The last three commas in the sentence starting "Additionally, plate..." need to be semicolons.
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * First two paragraphs in the only tornado breakout subsection need citations.
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Comma after "one person was killed"
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)

Non-tornadic impacts

 * This section would sorely benefit from more paragraph breaks and better organization.
 * Comma after (Morton Mills, Iowa" (GEOCOMMA)
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 17:43, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * "Overexertion" one word
 * ✅ Thanks for handling this for me. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 19:09, 24 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Comma after "electric line"
 * ✅ I'm not sure when this was done, but it is done. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 19:09, 24 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Comma after "foot deep"
 * ✅ Thanks for handling this for me. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 19:09, 24 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Decapitalize southern; Comma after "Barber County, Kansas"; Comma after "Hardtner" to complete an appositive.
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 17:43, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Remove the last "and" and add a comma
 * ✅ ChessEric (talk · contribs) 17:43, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Would getting newspaper sources help?
 * Indeed. I'll see what I can find. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 17:43, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * @ChessEric, I can assist if you tell me what you feel needs newspaper clippings. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 19:49, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much! ChessEric (talk · contribs) 20:08, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * @ChessEric I clipped a few summaries of storm damage from the next day. Do these help?   Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 18:45, 24 August 2022 (UTC)
 * It appears so. Thank you. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 18:53, 24 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Let me know when you've incorporated that, make sure to run a date script and archive references, and ping me. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 18:54, 24 August 2022 (UTC)
 * This is why newspapers (and Grazulis) are SO helpful. The NCEI track of the F4 tornado is total BS. The ENTIRE section regarding the F4 tornado needs a rewrite. The GA may need to be held off entirely because of this. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 18:07, 25 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Whoa, I missed this ping! Looks like we're going to have to rethink this. I will fail this GA to allow fixing of this particular issue and am more than happy to contribute newspaper sourcing if more is needed. @ChessEric, you should consider applying for Newspapers.com access through WP:TWL. I wouldn't be here today without it. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 01:59, 26 August 2022 (UTC)

Other items

 * Both tables have captions.
 * No Earwig issues.
 * Run a date script to convert reference dates to mdy: User:Ohconfucius/script/MOSNUM dates.
 * Can you enter this in for me? I don't know how to do that. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 19:09, 24 August 2022 (UTC)
 * @ChessEric Done. All you need to do is just put the sources in. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 02:12, 25 August 2022 (UTC)