Talk:Tornado outbreak of Leap Day 1952/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 21:50, 18 April 2022 (UTC)

I'll review this nomination, comments are below and nomination is on hold. This was an interesting read! PCN02WPS ( talk  &#124;  contribs ) 21:50, 18 April 2022 (UTC)

Lead/infobox

 * Already linked in the infobox, but I'd link tornado outbreak in the first sentence of the lead as well.
 * Might be slightly unneeded, but it wouldn't hurt to link USD in the lead.
 * The infobox image caption needs a comma after "Tennessee" per MOS:GEOCOMMA
 * Could you expand the lead a bit, perhaps with a few more sentences? A small synopsis of the F3 and F4 tornadoes would be helpful since those were the two most severe storms of the outbreak.
 * Expanded lead sounds good - I added one comma myself and only have one fix to make: "On the north side of Fort Payne, Alabama, an F3 tornado caused major damage in Fort Payne, Alabama" → This sentence repeats the parts in bold and lacks a period.
 * Thank you. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 09:21, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Could you expand the lead a bit, perhaps with a few more sentences? A small synopsis of the F3 and F4 tornadoes would be helpful since those were the two most severe storms of the outbreak.
 * Expanded lead sounds good - I added one comma myself and only have one fix to make: "On the north side of Fort Payne, Alabama, an F3 tornado caused major damage in Fort Payne, Alabama" → This sentence repeats the parts in bold and lacks a period.
 * Thank you. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 09:21, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 09:21, 19 April 2022 (UTC)

Meteorological synopsis

 * Change links from general U.S. state articles to the specific regions you're describing – Southern Indiana, Central Ohio (which is a redirect to Columbus metropolitan area, Ohio), Central Arkansas, North Texas, Northeast Alabama.
 * For readers that are not quite as familiar with meteorological terminology, linking or briefly explaining cold front, jet stream, trough, and thunderstorm (however trivial the last one may be) could be helpful. (I would also link any of these terms that appear in the lead)
 * I would also consider linking tornado since it hasn't been linked to this point in the article
 * I would also consider linking tornado since it hasn't been linked to this point in the article
 * I would also consider linking tornado since it hasn't been linked to this point in the article

Confirmed tornadoes
Additional Note: I just added some Grazulis data into the table and section. If you want to look that over, you can. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 15:44, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Is there a need for the subheader "February 29 event"? All of the storms occurred on that day, and the article is titled accordingly, so I'm not sure this header is needed since there isn't any use in differentiating storms that occurred on different days.
 * ✅ It was removed. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:45, 18 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Note 2 says that the average width (I'm assuming as opposed to the maximum width) was recorded for storms prior to 1994; does this conflict with the "max width" column in the table?
 * This is kept on each of the tornado outbreak pages. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:45, 18 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Note: It is somewhat weird I guess, but this is the current table format. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 04:21, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * I'm sure this is probably standardized across tornado articles, but is there a need to keep "parish" in the column header, since no storms occurred in Louisiana?
 * All tornado tables include County/Parish regardless of if tornadoes were in Louisiana or not. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:45, 18 April 2022 (UTC)

Fayetteville, Tennessee

 * "Downtown Fayetteville" → "downtown Fayetteville" since the article is about the city, not the downtown specifically
 * "NWS Huntsville says the tornado travelled 7 miles (11 km)" → I think this would fit better in a footnote, especially because of the double parentheses. I'd also link National Weather Service to "NWS"
 * Note: NOW its done, I forgot to add the nb grouping to it. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 16:09, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
 * "Of the 1,828 buildings in Fayetteville, 932 were damaged or destroyed, including 244 destroyed homes and other buildings and 360 other damaged homes and buildings. In all, 139 homes were destroyed, 152 had major damage, and another 164 sustained minor damage." → bolded section seems unnecessary to me since the exact number of destroyed and damaged homes are given in the next sentence.
 * "...six churches alone in Downtown Fayetteville were estimated..." → lowercase "downtown"
 * "Several business houses were..." → is there a reason semicolons are used in this sentence instead of commas?
 * expand "CDNS", and link if the organization has an article (I can't check as I don't know what this stands for)
 * expand ">$3 million" to "over $3 million"
 * add comma after "Illinois" per GEOCOMMA
 * "Several business houses were..." → is there a reason semicolons are used in this sentence instead of commas?
 * expand "CDNS", and link if the organization has an article (I can't check as I don't know what this stands for)
 * expand ">$3 million" to "over $3 million"
 * add comma after "Illinois" per GEOCOMMA
 * expand ">$3 million" to "over $3 million"
 * add comma after "Illinois" per GEOCOMMA
 * add comma after "Illinois" per GEOCOMMA

Fort Payne, Alabama

 * While I agree with the sentiment, the word "miraculously" doesn't seem totally neutral and could potentially be classified as a peacock term
 * "An electric refrigerator, a bicycle, other toys and large pieces of furniture, were all..." → remove comma after "furniture"
 * "which was twisted about 10 inches (25 cm) off of its foundation" → add bolded word
 * Not sure what you mean by this. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:45, 18 April 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ I understand now. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 00:33, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * The word "huge" seems a touch out of place to me; could it be replaced with something like "large"?
 * link neon sign
 * " (NWS Huntsville says 1,200 yards (1,100 m) wide)" → same as above, I'd put this in a footnote
 * Note: Same thing as above. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 16:10, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
 * "In all, 12 homes and 25 buildings were destroyed, 20 homes damaged, and 35 other buildings were damaged and 12 people were injured." → "and" repeated; could this be reworded?
 * ✅ I reworded it. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 04:21, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Note: NOW it's done. The page reloaded before I could save the original edit. LOL! ChessEric (talk · contribs) 04:44, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Note: Same thing as above. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 16:10, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
 * "In all, 12 homes and 25 buildings were destroyed, 20 homes damaged, and 35 other buildings were damaged and 12 people were injured." → "and" repeated; could this be reworded?
 * ✅ I reworded it. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 04:21, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Note: NOW it's done. The page reloaded before I could save the original edit. LOL! ChessEric (talk · contribs) 04:44, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Note: NOW it's done. The page reloaded before I could save the original edit. LOL! ChessEric (talk · contribs) 04:44, 19 April 2022 (UTC)

Non-tornadic impacts

 * link hail
 * "The squall line moved rapidly eastward, passing over Lovell Field at 8:17 pm and capsizing several small aircraft." → the term "capsizing" strikes me as a nautical term as opposed to an aviation one. Is this the case or do the sources use the term "capsizing"?
 * Note: That was the term used in the CDNS report. I'll see if I can find more info on this and use some better terminology. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 04:49, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * I, unfortunately, couldn't find any more information on the subject so I can't change it since I would only be guessing. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 06:43, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * "Hailstones of approximately $3/4$ inch (1.9 cm) in diameter" → remove bolded word
 * I'm not sure what you are talking about here. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 23:45, 18 April 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ I understand now. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 00:33, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * comma after "Monteagle, Tennessee"
 * "Additional, but light, damage also occurred outside..." → can be simplified to "Additional light damage also occurred outside..." or "Light damage also occurred outside..."
 * specify link to Southeastern Pennsylvania (which redirects to Delaware Valley)
 * "...with the heaviest snow in the southern part of it." → I'd simplify to "in the south" and link that to South Jersey
 * "One person was killed, and 10 others were injured" → remove comma
 * "mid/late-afternoon" → "mid- to late afternoon", since "mid-afternoon" is commonly hyphenated but "late afternoon" is not
 * "Air Force" → link to United States Air Force
 * comma after "Newberry, South Carolina"
 * "One person was killed, and 10 others were injured" → remove comma
 * "mid/late-afternoon" → "mid- to late afternoon", since "mid-afternoon" is commonly hyphenated but "late afternoon" is not
 * "Air Force" → link to United States Air Force
 * comma after "Newberry, South Carolina"
 * "Air Force" → link to United States Air Force
 * comma after "Newberry, South Carolina"
 * comma after "Newberry, South Carolina"
 * comma after "Newberry, South Carolina"

Aftermath and historical significance

 * Fayetteville, Tennessee is already linked in the article, so it doesn't need to be repeated
 * comma after "Fayetteville, Tennessee"
 * add semicolons as separators in the list of dates since commas are in mdy style.
 * add semicolons as separators in the list of dates since commas are in mdy style.
 * add semicolons as separators in the list of dates since commas are in mdy style.

Notes and references

 * Ref No. 2 does not take me to a specific publication but rather to a page where you can select a publication to view; can you update this to target the publication used to source the statements in the article? When you update that, also make sure to update the  parameter to display the full name of the website or its organization rather than the URL (as with the point below)
 * ✅ I changed it to a Google Book ref of the CDNS report. The CDNS site does indeed lead to the publication selection page, but the publication on this site are PDF links that I'm pretty sure expire. This seems like an effective alternative though. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 09:19, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * update parameter for ref No. 3 to display National Weather Service
 * Ref 6: Is there a better source for this statement than "Facts Just for Kids"? I'm not questioning the validity of the source or the statement, just that there is probably a more reputable or reliable source out there for this statement.
 * I actually had 2 refs for this. The other one was from the Tornado History Project, but that site went down around January 2021. This is the only other ref I could find. I could link it to the SPC WCM page, but that goes to an excel page. I will work to find another ref, but for now, this ref will have to stay. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 08:18, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Note: I'm still attempting to look for an additional source for this. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 21:01, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
 * @ChessEric Sorry for the long break in the review. Have you found any replacement source for Ref 7? Additionally, which piece of information in that paragraph does Ref 7 specifically source? PCN02WPS  ( talk  &#124;  contribs ) 21:25, 27 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Ref 7 is the source that talks about how the F1 tornado caused the most injuries of any tornado rated F1/EF1. Like I said above, the Tornado History Project was the main source that I used, although I used this source as well, but the site has since gone down, leaving only this source. I currently cannot find another source for this. ChessEric (talk · contribs) 21:52, 27 April 2022 (UTC)
 * I've read a bit on the "about" part of the website and it seems to be alright - of course, there would be better sources but I feel like this one is good enough that the nomination shouldn't be held up because of it. Other than that, all of my issues have been addressed so I am comfortable giving this a pass. Well done. PCN02WPS  ( talk  &#124;  contribs ) 02:58, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you! ChessEric (talk · contribs) 03:03, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you! ChessEric (talk · contribs) 03:03, 28 April 2022 (UTC)