Talk:Tororo (food)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 16:41, 14 January 2024 (UTC)


 * Will edit the changes required once I get my hands on them. Arconning (talk) 13:58, 16 January 2024 (UTC)
 * OK, thanks. It'd be helpful to know your rough timescale for this. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:07, 16 January 2024 (UTC)
 * On the 20th of January, I believe it should be done by then. Arconning (talk) 09:02, 17 January 2024 (UTC)
 * @Chiswick Chap I believe everything has been addressed. Please let me know if it's up to standard. Arconning (talk) 16:39, 20 January 2024 (UTC)

Comments

 * Lead needs to be extended to summarize each section of the article.
 * ✅ Lengthened to supply more information.


 * "the same genus of species": unclear what this might mean, and it's not present in the main text or cited. It seems that the "Production" section is missing an account of the yam species (with Latin names and citations) used for tororo.
 * ✅ Removed unclear wording. Put Latin names and citations.


 * "must be tubers that are edible when eaten raw ... boiling thoroughly before consumption...": the point here is rather that all yams are tubers, but most are toxic when eaten raw, so only kinds A and B (species names required) can be used. Most of the paragraph text is basically off-topic for this article, and the needed information isn't here or is not clearly presented.
 * ✅ Shortened paragraph, removed other off-topic information.
 * Raw yams that are mostly used in the process of making tororo, namely yamaimo (Dioscorea japonica) and/or nagaimo (Dioscorea polystachya). -- is not a sentence. Perhaps you mean something like "Tororo is usually made from raw yam of either of two species, namely yamaimo (Dioscorea japonica) and/or nagaimo (Dioscorea polystachya)." ?
 * ✅ Replaced sentence.


 * suribachi, surikogi, soba, yamakake, hamachi, etc: please briefly gloss each term when first mentioned so readers not familiar with Japanese cuisine can understand the text.
 * ✅ Done. Let me know if I missed some terms.


 * Medical claims: both Nutrition and Uses in food make claims that would not pass WP:MEDRS. Because of the danger that readers will take Wikipedia as medical advice, we are not allowed to claim anything that has not been accepted by the medical profession in a formal systematic review article: it is not sufficient for this type of claim just to cite a WP:PRIMARY medical research paper. Please either remove the claims altogether, or cut them down to a brief mention (just once, I suggest in Nutrition, with removal from Uses in food) of blood sugar; the claims of preventing any disease are unacceptable, as of improving stamina. If you want a text, it could be "A study suggests that tororo helps to lower blood sugar." (and nothing more).
 * ✅ Removed medical claims in "Uses in food" and "Nutrition". Cut down the text.


 * "Many soups ... kotozute-jiru." requires a citation.
 * ✅ Done.


 * Please introduce each person named at first mention, e.g. "the Edo period priest Anrakuan Sakuden", "the poet Matsuo Bashō".
 * ✅ Done.

Images

 * All the images are from Commons, where they each have plausible licenses permitting their use.

Summary

 * This is almost there: I've one question on the yams sentence, above. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:01, 20 January 2024 (UTC)
 * @Chiswick Chap I've replaced the sentence with the correct one. Hope everything passes. Arconning (talk) 02:38, 21 January 2024 (UTC)