Talk:Transformers: Fall of Cybertron/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Torchiest (talk · contribs) 18:02, 7 December 2012 (UTC)

Starting my review. —Torchiest talkedits 18:02, 7 December 2012 (UTC) GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * This is quite good, but there are a few minor points to resolve below.
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * This is quite good, but there are a few minor points to resolve below.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * This is quite good, but there are a few minor points to resolve below.


 * Comments
 * Is there anything to link to for "origins subplot" in the lead?
 * I had trouble with this, too. The best I could do is link to the Dinobots article, as apparently their origin is different in each continuity, but "Gen 1" is the official origin.
 * "Optimus engages Megatron directly, and Bumblebee later heads to join him after being temporarily rerouted." That sentence is a bit confusing.
 * Reworded
 * Energon, capitalized or not? I see both.
 * Lower case, fixed
 * What is Iacon?
 * Clarified
 * Is there a way to explain what a "power core" is without getting too tangential? It's a bit of a specialized term for a lay reader.
 * Clarified
 * "During an investor conference in November 2010 Hasbro confirmed that a sequel to the 2010 game Transformers: War for Cybertron would be developed with a release set for fall in 2012.[7][10]" I don't see "fall 2012" in either of those sources. Also, it's preferred to avoid using seasons, since southern hemisphere readers will be reversed.  Finally, "in" should not be between the time of year and the year's number.
 * Removed season and year entirely as it the sentence's focus is on confirming the development.
 * "He further praised the game's predecessor and stated that it was "shockingly good"." Necessary to mention this in reference to previous game?
 * Removed
 * I noticed that generally Optimus Prime is referred to as Optimus for short, but caught one instance of calling him Prime. Double check for consistency.
 * Found no other instances in a search where Prime was used as a shortener
 * The ordering of the DLC packs is a little confusing. Do you have a date for the Multiplayer Havoc Pack?  Why is it mentioned after the other two packs, when it was supposedly the first one released?  Also, none of the last part of the last paragraph in the release section is sourced.
 * Fixed
 * Otherwise, this is a very good article, and I'll be ready to promote it after addressing the above. —Torchiest talkedits 19:26, 7 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Covered most of these. I'll tackle the DLC issue later on today/tomorrow/Monday. Thanks for the review. --Teancum (talk) 19:20, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Took care of the DLC issue. I think that covers it. --Teancum (talk) 16:22, 12 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Happy to pass this now.  Congrats. —Torchiest talkedits 16:41, 12 December 2012 (UTC)