Talk:Transmasculine Definition

I chose the article about the Egyptian Feminism Union. As of now, the article only has a history and profile section. I plan on adding additional sections to the article. The sections include:AmyR7 (talk) 06:58, 29 October 2016 (UTC) 1. Military involvementAmyR7 (talk) 06:58, 29 October 2016 (UTC) 2. I want to discuss more about the life of Huda Shaarawi, the woman who influenced the Egyptian Feminist movement. AmyR7 (talk) 06:58, 29 October 2016 (UTC) 3. This article should include information on Tamarud. This is like the Egyptian Feminist Movement but it is founded by the youth of Egypt. It is supported by the Egyptian Feminist Union and so it is important to discuss and add to this article. AmyR7 (talk) 01:55, 30 October 2016 (UTC)

References AmyR7 (talk) 01:55, 30 October 2016 (UTC) AmyR7 (talk) 01:55, 30 October 2016 (UTC)

edits on actual pages and signing your posts
Amy, I've noticed that while you have edited your own talk page, you haven't edited on the encyclopedia page that you're going to work on editing. I think one of the issues may be that you have not signed your posts. One more thing, you will want to not cite another encyclopedia in your encyclopedia article. Look for more and better information! Drlmanderson (talk) 19:46, 4 November 2016 (UTC)

Definition
Transmasculine defines people that do not associate with the the female sex organs that they were born with. An individual that is assigned female at birth but feels as if they should have been a man is described as a transmaculine individual. Transmasculine individuals are a homogenous group of people that are transitioning into a different sex than the one that they were assigned. The catagorization of this particular population of individuals does not single out this particular transition from female to male. Instead, it incorporates the transmascuine term into the transsexual or transgender umbrella. AmyR7 (talk) 04:30, 8 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 02:52, 10 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 02:54, 10 November 2016 (UTC) A transsexual is a person that desires to be the opposite gender of their original sex. Transsexual individuals live their life as the opposite sex and want others to view them as the gender that they portray. Some transsexuals also desire to have sexual reassignment surgery so that their anatomy matches the gender that they want to be. Under the transsexual and transgender umbrella are many 'subgrops' that are associated with transmasculine individuals. The most common terms are boy-chick, ungendered, new man, or transfag. AmyR7 (talk) 14:48, 16 November 2016 (UTC) In regards to a sexual partner, transmasucline individuals tend to be attracted to partners that are female. Transmasculine individuals view these relationships with women as heterosexual relationships. AmyR7 (talk) 04:05, 21 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 03:42, 22 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 03:48, 22 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 03:49, 22 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 04:42, 22 November 2016 (UTC)Drlmanderson (talk) 23:20, 4 December 2016 (UTC)

Medical Care
Currently, physicians are treating transmasculine individuals and other transgender individuals without prior training on how to administer the correct dosage of medication or how to treat individuals that are wanting to transition from male to female and female to male AmyR7 (talk) 04:25, 8 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 02:52, 10 November 2016 (UTC) The fear of discrimination or unfair treatment leads to many transgender and transmasculine indivduals avoiding proper medical care. AmyR7 (talk) 04:25, 8 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 04:30, 8 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 02:52, 10 November 2016 (UTC) One type of medical treatment that transmasculine individuals receive is testosterone treatment. This treatment helps make their female sounding voices sound deeper and more similar to a man's voice. AmyR7 (talk) 04:25, 8 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 04:30, 8 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 02:52, 10 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 04:02, 22 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 04:05, 22 November 2016 (UTC)AmyR7 (talk) 04:42, 22 November 2016 (UTC)

Peer Critique
Hi Amy,

Good start on your article! You found two really great sources (#5 and #6). I think those will be very useful for fleshing out this page. David Azul's article is great because it speaks to the complexity of your topic. I would advise you to look closely at your spelling after you've finished writing for the day--"categorization" is a word that you misspelled a few times, as well as "transsexual" and "transgender". Also, don't forget that every fact needs at least one citation. I would recommend putting a note on every sentence, even if it seems repetitive to cite the same source over and over. For example, in your definition section, you only cite a source at the very end of your paragraph. I would look for more scholarly sources so that you can flesh out each section with more facts. I recommend looking over some of your sentence structures as well as a few are a bit unclear.

I really like your idea to discuss the medical care involved with gender transitions--the failings of current medicine to be accommodating to the needs of transgender persons is a big problem. I would expand your the "health risks" section to "medical interventions" or something more general so that you can talk about the different aspects of transition that transmasculine persons may choose, the current medical policies and knowledge that motivate doctors' actions, the instances of malpractice that can happen, and the alienation trans* persons may feel when doctors are not understanding of their situation. I am looking forward to seeing how your page develops! Jokretzmer (talk) 01:51, 14 November 2016 (UTC)