Talk:Trapped in the Sky/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: we eb il oo bi l  ( talk ) 09:25, 16 October 2010 (UTC)

Hello! I'm weebiloobil, and I'm here to assess Trapped in the Sky in accordance with the Good Article criteria. If you have any comments or questions, feel free to leave them here or on my talk page. Good luck! - we eb il oo bi l  ( talk ) 09:25, 16 October 2010 (UTC)

The Review
Sorry about the wait, I wanted to re-watch the episode (as part of the review, of course) and it took me a while to find my DVD of it.

Overall I think this is an excellent article; although there isn't much material on the subject, the organisation and presentation style are great, and I love the two quotes in the boxes. The fair use information for the picture is very good as well. Nevertheless, I have a few issues: Aside from those, I feel the article is a brilliant example of what Wikipedia has to offer. Well done! I'm placing the article on hold until those issues are sorted out, and I'll be back in a week to see how you're getting on. Bye! - we eb il oo bi l  ( talk ) 10:02, 21 October 2010 (UTC)
 * The first sentence states that Thunderbirds is "a British 1960s Supermarionation television series of Gerry Anderson"; this makes it sound like there was a camera focused on him for the entire series - I think something like 'created by Gerry Anderson' makes a bit more sense.
 * The sentence ""While "Trapped in the Sky" remains critically acclaimed more than four decades after its first broadcast on British television,[4] an audio adaptation, with Shane Rimmer as narrator in character as Scott Tracy, has been released on the Century 21 mini-LP, "Thunderbird 1".[5]"" makes no sense; what does the fact that the episode is still critically acclaimed have to do with Rimmer once recording the audio adaptation? This should really be two separate sentences.
 * Barry Gray recorded the theme tune with "30-member orchestra" - that sounds like a strange name for a band, and I think he would probably have been better off recording with a 20-member orchestra.
 * Coming from WikiProject Doctor Who, I'm used to seeing names beginning with 'the' having no capital T, e.g. 'the Doctor', and my copy of Bentley's 'Complete Book of Thunderbirds' says things like "blows the Hood's car off the road"; is there a reason that this article used "The Hood" sometimes, and "the Hood" at others?
 * I have one last little question. WP:LEAD says "'Significant information should not appear in the lead if it is not covered in the remainder of the article, although this does not mean that everything in the lead must be repeated in the body of the text: specific facts will often appear only in the lead, such as quotations, examples, birthdates, and titles, depending on editorial judgment.'" However, the lead of this article mentions the audio adaptation without it being covered later on. Is it insignificant enough to only be referenced in the lead? - we eb il oo bi l  ( talk ) 15:04, 24 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Ah, that's right. The sentence is now in the reception section - if not the lead, it probably suits that section the most. I think that I moved this reference to the introduction in the first place because a one-line section titled "Audio adaptation" did not seem satisfactory.  Super Mario  Man  16:08, 24 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, that removes any objections I have to the article's promotion. Congratulations! - we eb il oo bi l  ( talk ) 19:48, 24 October 2010 (UTC)
 * P.S. Please repay this review by reviewing a Good Article yourself