Talk:Trapper Nelson/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: Noted 7  (t · c) Reviewer: Quadell (talk) 13:43, 20 July 2011 (UTC)

Remaining issues

 * The 3rd paragraph in "Decline" has a number of surprising statements, any of which could be challenged, and there are three footnotes together at the end of the paragraph. I don't think all three sources confirm each fact. It would be better to have some of the individual claims referenced independently.


 * The "Harvey, Dorothy" footnote #7 does indeed confirm that someone named Ellison Wilson (among others) visited the zoo, but it doesn't indicate who he was. He doesn't seem notable. Would it be better to simply say the following? "Locally prominent people and celebrities alike visited,{citation 7 goes here} including boxing champion..."


 * In the last paragraph of "Death", I don't think DuBois' quote adds anything to the article. It works better without it, in my opinion.


 * It gets too close to original research with the "it may have been possible for someone to sneak up on him" bit. The source attributes this speculation to Joe Vleck, the last man to see Nelson alive. I think the article should attribute the guess instead of stating it, even if it's only attributed to "a neighbor" or somesuch.


 * Do we have a good estimate for how long he was dead when he was found? One source indicates it was at least a week... do any get more specific? Can we be sure he died in 1968?


 * A Persondata box is needed.


 * Better categories are needed. We can get more specific than "people from Florida".


 * According to WP:LEAD, the lede should summarize all parts of the article, but the "Early life" and the first half of "Settlement..." aren't summarized in the lede. Also, since the lede shouldn't provide info not included in the body of the article, it doesn't need footnotes. The "Tarzan of the Loxahatchee" moniker is referenced to "Jupiter Kid's History" in the lede, but this should be cited in the "Settlement..." section instead. The other lede footnote is redundant with the body.


 * The only image is mistagged on Commons, and will probably be deleted. See Media copyright questions. Are there any free images anywhere of this guy? Or of the park? Any non-free images on Flickr we could e-mail and ask if they'll release under a free license?