Talk:Travis Konecny/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 14:29, 28 November 2021 (UTC) Nominator: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) at at 19:53, 25 October 2021 (UTC)

Comments
Lead
 * Just prior to the 2016–17 NHL season, Flyers general manager Ron Hextall — linking 'general manager' seems over-linking.
 * Reworded instead. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * but struggled after the interruptions caused by the COVID-19 pandemic — 'struggled' doesn't seem the best word here. Can we rephrase a bit?
 * Reworded. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)

Early life
 * He grew up in Clachan, Ontario, — Just like the lead, I think writing this as just 'Clachan' would suffice. Especially as 'Ontario' has already been mentioned in the previous sentence.
 * Done. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * Although began playing — missing 'he'
 * Added. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)

Playing career
 * Just as the lead, mention that 'Ontario Hockey League' is abbreviated to 'OHL'
 * Done. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * linking 'general manager' seems over-linking, here as well
 * ❌. General manager has a very specific role within the team. They handle all personnel decisions. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * By January, → "By January 2017,"
 * done. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * After taking a hit against the St. Louis Blues on February 6, however, Konecny was — can remove 'however' and the commas from this sentence
 * done. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * after his battle with the virus — needs to be rephrased.
 * done. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)

International play
 * Konecny made his international debut with a number of performances for Canada in under-18 tournaments in 2014. — pipe 'in under-18 tournaments' to Canada men's national under-18 ice hockey team
 * reworded differently but to the same effect. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * against Sweden — the linking makes it appear like WP:EGG
 * Changed to "the Swedish team". —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * lost to Finland — same as above
 * Changed to "the Finnish team". —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)

Player profile
 * "176 lb" in infobox v. "178 pounds" in this section.
 * fixed. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * he has learned to focus on speed and agility over strength — can't say this in Wikipedia's voice
 * Clarified. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * with age, he has learned to temper these impulses and improve his decision-making on plays. — same as above, needs attribution to who considers this.
 * Clarified. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * frequently "chirping" insults — Avoid quoting single words. (MOS:QUOTEPOV)
 * Chirping is a hockey term. I linked to the glossary instead. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)

Personal life
 * and has been taught → "was taught"
 * Fixed. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)

Awards and honours
 * I made a general table formatting edit. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:29, 28 November 2021 (UTC)

References Looking good overall, just few minor comments. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:29, 28 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Few sources have website/news agency linked (example. The Province, Hockey-Reference.com, etc.) while most other have not. Suggesting to be consistent. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:29, 28 November 2021 (UTC)
 * In the process of fixing per MOS:REFLINK. I have been told before by MOS:DUPLINK that you should not repeat linked citation works, but I see now that is incorrect. It appears there is no official policy either way, just that you can duplink citations. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * Moreover, if I am not mistaken, this point lies outside the GA criteria, so it can be ignored. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:17, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * I have made all edits except where noted. Unfortunately, I don't think I can review the article you suggested, as I have a number of deadlines in the coming weeks that will limit my on-Wiki effectiveness. —  Ghost River  18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
 * No issues at-all. Will read the article again with a view to pass it soon. Thanks for all your work here! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:17, 2 December 2021 (UTC)

Other comments

 * Also, it would be appreciated if you could review Day of Infamy speech, which I want to feature on the main page on December 7/8, so I'll need it to be GA soon. No issues if you cannot. Thanks! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:49, 28 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Happy to pass the article! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:35, 2 December 2021 (UTC)