Talk:Trevor Bauer/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk · contribs) 02:43, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this (more quickly than last time)! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:43, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Lead

 * ”with pitching, and would often practice” – “with pitching, often practicing”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”junior year with a” – “junior year in which he posted a”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”but followed this effort” – “but he followed this effort”
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 * ” Bauer became a free agent after the 2020 season, and chose to sign a three-year contract with the Dodgers that February” – “A free agent after the 2020 season, Bauer signed a three-year contract with the Dodgers in February 2021.”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ” He led the league in both strikeouts and innings pitched by July 2, when MLB placed Bauer on administrative leave while they investigated assault allegations made against him” – Update to “He led the league in both strikeouts and innings pitched through July 2 but spent the rest of the season on administrative leave imposed by MLB as they investigated assault allegations made against him”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Early life

 * ”Clarita, and spent” – “Clarita, and he spent”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Did he graduate early because he didn’t mesh with his teammates? Or did he graduate early because he wanted to start his college career early, and he also happened to not mesh with his teammates?
 * Per the source: "It was enough to make me decide not to play my senior year, regardless of if I had a chance to go to college or not," Bauer said Monday. "So, I'll leave it there." I changed to "in part because" —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

College career

 * ” a 2.99 ERA, 105+1⁄3 innings pitched, and was named” – “a 2.99 ERA, and 105+1⁄3 innings pitched, also getting named”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”combined again in 2010” – I’d take out again, since not much is mentioned of their 2009 performance other than that they were teammates.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ” to an unbroken 10–0 record at the start of the season, the best record since the school” - to a 10–0 start, the best record to begin the season since the school”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”built to a” – “built a”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * What day was the Gallego error?
 * —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”over Arizona” – I’d say Arizona Wildcats or the University of Arizona, since it’s not the same Arizona he pitched for later on.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ” bringing his total record to 28–7” – “gaining a 28—7 record” – more parallel with usurping.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Hmmm…who’s that guy who won the Golden Spikes Award in 2008? (Sorry, just had to mention it!)
 * I was going to make a snide comment about 2010, but at least we can agree on '98! —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Minor leagues

 * I forget—did anyone seem to think Bauer might go first, or was the consensus that Cole would be the first prospect taken?
 * Cole was pretty much universally projected to go first because he had been so consistently strong, whereas Bauer didn't really hop onto the radar until his junior year; added a sentence & ref from ESPN about that —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”on July 25, and was” – No comma needed
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”August 16, 2011” – don’t need the year, since already mentioned.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”spring training, and went” – No comma needed.
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 * ”rotation, and was assigned” – “rotation, and he was assigned”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”but was unavailable” – “but he was unavailable”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Skaggs—are you familiar with him at all? (haha)
 * What, no! Who's that guy? Should I have heard of him? ;) (Actually, I'm pretty sure that I found that source while doing research on Bauer and had to add it back into the Skaggs article, because I didn't know who he had been replacing at the Futures Game!) —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Arizona Diamondbacks

 * This section looks good!

Cleveland Indians

 * Kind of a long section, might want to divide by seasons. (How many per section is up to you.)
 * ✅ Yeah, I agree —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I’d have more on 2014—did he start the season in the minors? When and why was he called up?
 * I think I worked on this section the one day that the "expand bio" wasn't working, and I just kind of had to freewheel it —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”scoring a leadoff” – “recording a leadoff”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I’d take out the part about the fielder’s choice—the point is he got his first hit.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * How long was the losing streak?
 * —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ” broken his thumb, but served as Bauer's regular catcher from there, with Bauer” – “broken his thumb. He became Bauer’s regular catcher from then on, with Bauer”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”Blue Jays, but suffered” – “Blue Jays, but he suffered”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”dropping both games” – I’d put losing, just to be a little clearer.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:14, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ” who managed to turn around the first half of the season for a 10–1 record and 2.60 ERA in his last 14 starts” – “who turned his season around by posting a 10–1 record and 2.60 ERA in his last 14 starts”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”32 games, and struck out” – “32 games, and he struck out”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”three on Yankees” – “three of Yankees”
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 * ”that he pitched” – “that he had pitched”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Glad you had the info about the new slider. It’s stuff like this that makes these articles really informative, as they help explain a player’s sudden improvement.
 * Thank you! One thing I've been trying to do in these articles is add a little more meat beyond the stats —  Ghost River  13:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”meant to start in the” – “meant to begin the”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”His push” – “Bauer’s push” – and then change Bauer to he later in sentence.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Switch he and Bauer around in the September 22 sentence.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  13:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Not a change for the article, but I never really understood why people got so upset at Bauer for throwing the ball over the centerfield fence at the stadium. Better to do that than throw it full power at a nearby fence and risk injuring someone.
 * Yeah, I mean, it is a little immature, but – I love Cliff Lee as much as anyone, and I think people forget all the temper tantrums that he used to throw. Most of those involved beanballing someone! —  Ghost River  13:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Cincinnati Reds

 * ”Bauer stumbled in” – “Bauer struggled in”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I’d take out the Barnhart sentence. Probably a little too in-depth to devote that much coverage to him struggling in one start.
 * I added a sentence in the pitching section about catchers having to adapt to his style of game, since that was also a point of contention when he was with Arizona —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”was tapped to” – “was selected to”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”battling 72/3” – “pitching 72/3”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”but remained open to” – “but he said he remained open to”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Los Angeles Dodgers

 * This section looks good!

Pitching style and criticism

 * There’s a few different places in the article where criticism is mentioned or alleged. I think, for clarity, I would call the section “Pitching style” and create a subsection for the last paragraph, titled “Pitch doctoring controversy”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”has been known for” – “has garnered attention over”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Business ventures

 * This section looks good!

Charitable campaigns

 * This section looks good!

Political beliefs and social media

 * I remember reading that he supported Mitt Romney in 2012; might be good to mention that as well.
 * ✅ Took some digging, but there was an article about, you guessed it, a Twitter thread he went on about the 2012 election! —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

--- "purporting" is a grammatical error. "a purported" is closer to what is meant. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 72.93.241.135 (talk) 18:21, 1 May 2022 (UTC)

Assault allegations

 * ”in 2017, and that”
 * I assume you meant to ask me to take out the comma? If so, ✅ —  Ghost River  12:52, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Great news; you don’t have to wait nine days for a review this time! Biggest change I found was that 2014 could use expansion; the rest seems like minor stuff. Let me know when you’re done, and I’ll give this another look! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 03:36, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for reviewing such a long article; I've implemented everything that you've suggested! —  Ghost River  13:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good now; passing. Nice work! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 14:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)