Talk:Tricolored bat/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 19:03, 29 October 2019 (UTC)


 * I propose taking on this review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:03, 29 October 2019 (UTC)

First reading
Basically the article seems well written and pretty comprehensive. A few points that struck me -
 * "French zoologist Frédéric Cuvier. Cuvier " - Best not to have two Cuviers consecutively.
 * done
 * "the "perimyotine group". The perimyotine group was" - Again, this is a bit too repetitive.
 * done
 * "It has blond fur " - As you are starting a new section, you need a name here.
 * done
 * "They are seasonal breeders," - The same is true here. It is best as far as possible to either use singular or plural in discussing the bat, but not dodge back and forth.
 * fixed
 * "Young do not reach sexual maturity in their first fall; they do not breed until they are a year old." - I think "a year old" is unhelpful, perhaps use "their second fall" or somesuch.
 * revised phrasing
 * The "Behavior" section uses the word "roost" nine times.
 * Was able to remove one instance, though not sure further simplification is possible as this is the accurate term for both the noun and the verb
 * "human structures" - Maybe "buildings"
 * changed
 * In the "Diet and foraging" section, you have a mixture of singular and plural bats
 * fixed
 * "Predators, parasites, and disease" section starts with "Its" and there is more singular/plural alternation
 * fixed
 * "I wonder whether "Relationship to people" is a good section title?
 * I'm trying to have internal consistency with other bat GAs I've written in terms of section titles and order. #Relationship to people is also found in Pteropus, Indian flying fox, big brown bat, and little brown bat. Do you have a suggestion for an alternative? I would just want to make sure I changed it in other articles as well.
 * Looking back at the lead now to see whether it summarises the main text well, I see it mentions the former name "eastern pipistrelle", but this is not mentioned elsewhere
 * added to taxonomy section
 * The lead suffers from the singular/plural problem again.
 * fixed
 * Wikilink Echolocation, roost, gestation, taxon and any other less well-known terms
 * added


 * That's all for now. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:02, 29 October 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks for taking on the review, . I should have time to get to this tomorrow! Enwebb (talk) 15:42, 30 October 2019 (UTC)


 * Looking at the citations, some of them need italics for species names, and #13 has a different date format from the other references. Give me a ping when you are ready for me to give the article another run through. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:44, 7 November 2019 (UTC)
 * fixed. Ready for another readthrough, . Enwebb (talk) 03:06, 8 November 2019 (UTC)

GA criteria

 * The article is well written and complies with MOS guidelines on prose and grammar, structure and layout.
 * The article uses many reliable third-party sources, and makes frequent citations to them. I do not believe it contains original research.
 * The article covers the main aspects of the subject and remains focussed.
 * The article is neutral.
 * The article is stable.
 * The images are relevant and have suitable captions, and are properly licensed.


 * Final assessment - I believe this article reaches the GA criteria. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:52, 8 November 2019 (UTC)